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Writ 3441: Editing Application 2: Due October 26 at 11:59 PM (30 pts). WRIT 3441 Editing Application 2 (30 pts) Grading Criteria Corrections Criteria Comments Points Sentence revisions Identify sentence types, revise sentences for core, voice, economy, and faults /8 Editing for consistency 30+/- possible revisions including terms, headings, number formats, and figure labels. /17 Following the style sheet Revisions adhere to the formats and guides listed in the stylesheet. /5 Total /30 Part 1: Directions: Use track changes or retype sentences to revise grammar and punctuation. Do not delete the problems in the sentences but identify the original errors and correct the grammar and punctuation in the given sentence. Identify the sentence type (complex, compound, simple) and the errors in punctuation . Revise for correct punctuation and briefly explain. 1. While sitting at the computer the writer imagined twisting plots and shady characters from his time as a government spy.  Sentence type  Error in punctuation (comma splice, run-on sentence, misplaced/missing punctuation)  Revision (brief explanation) i. Sentence Type: Complex ii. Error: Missing Punctuation/Run-on Sentence

iii. Insert Comma after “computer”, creating complex sentence 2. Many companies incorporate their editors as an integral part of the design process, editors usually develop a close relationship with the design team a benefit for all.  Sentence type  Error in punctuation (comma splice, run-on sentence, misplaced/missing punctuation)  Revision (brief explanation) i. Sentence Type: Compound ii. Error: Comma splice iii. Insert semi-colon in place of comma, add “as a result,” prior to “editors”, add comma after “team” Edit the following sentence to use the sentence core effectively and to place subject and verb together near the beginning of the sentence. 3. An agreement by the film industry and by television producers on limiting characters smoking cigarettes would do little to discourage young people from smoking.  The film industry and television producers can’t discourage young people from smoking; their agreement on limiting characters smoking cigarettes is ineffective. Revise the following sentence for a stronger subject and verb (core) and for active voice. Identify and eliminate nominalizations and weak verbs (p. 177, and course packet, pp. 49–51) where you can find better options. Delete wordy or unnecessary phrases. Briefly explain your revision. 4. Many arguments were advanced against Darwinian evolution in the nineteenth century because basic assumptions about our place in the world were challenged by it. No longer were humans defined as privileged creatures but rather as a product of natural forces. Evolution was vigorously rejected by British and American churches because the theory directly contradicted many of the core teachings of the Christian faith according to religious leaders.  Many arguments advanced against Darwinian evolution in the nineteenth century after challenging basic assumptions about our place in the world. Humans were no longer defined as privileged creatures but rather as a product of natural forces. British

The RDC-CI Data Logger RDCCI logger accurately monitors chemical flow through injection quills and nozzles using a positive displacement flow meter to calculate chemical delivery rates (See Figure 1 ) . Figure 1: Data Logger with Flow Meter Easy-t T o-i I nterpret g G raphed i I njection r R ates Chemical delivery rates are easy - to - interpret by viewing the graphic display of the included RDC-CI Data Logger Data Logger Interface Manager software and collected data can be transferred directly to a lap - top if located in a safe area, or a hazardous area (See Figure 2).

Figure 2: Data Logger Interface Manager Graphical Display 3. Suitable for multiple applications : Available for use with a wide variety of chemical agents and in operating temperatures ranging from - 40 0 F to 158 0 F (- 40 0 C to 70 0 C), the RDC-CI Data Logger Data Logger gathers data in 0.5-gallon increments, yielding very accurate flow rates over user- selectable time periods ranging from two 2 minutes to 24 h ou rs. The Logger accepts a wide range of chemical flow rates from 0.5 - – 100 gal lon . per one day. The RDC-CI Data Logger RDC CI typically has a twelve 12- month battery life. The Logger can be piped permanently, or piped temporarily, using our Quick-Connect Flexible Hose Accessory Kit with quick - connect couplings to allow for occasional in-line testing ( See Fig ure 3).

Gain a A ccurate d D ata t T o i I mprove c C hemical i I njection p P erformance a A nd r R educe c C osts Reduce the expense of chemical over-treatment. Quickly discover chemical flow interruptions caused by low-tank levels, pump failures, or vapor locked, high - temperature situations. Gain immediate, improved, and economical asset management with the RDC - CI Chemical Injection Data Logger. Key benefits of the RDC-CI Chemical Injection Data Logger  Ensures continuous and cost-effective chemical injection .  M m onitors chemical flow accurately  Includes u U ser-adjustable graphical analysis software included  Allow s for a wide variety of applications and chemicals  Maintains c C orrect injection rates are always maintained.  A a llows quick battery installation in remote locations  Transfers simple data easily  Offers t T wo-year limited w W arranty offered Ordering i I nformation Model: RDC-CI Data Logger Assembly Kit complete with installation instructions for PC s S oftware ($650.00 dollars in four installment payments) Accessories  Part 00287: Micro Data Logger Transfer Unit for h H azardous areas ( $ 245 dollars )  Part 001696: Si x 6 - f oot t - long Quick-Connect flexible hoses ( two 2 hoses for $39.95; four hoses for $75) Replacement parts  Part 702167: Replacement b B attery for RDC-CI Data Logger RDCCI 3.6 volt lithium b B attery ( $ 56 dollars )  Part 001700: Filter Replacement Element Kit ($56.25) A–E cost-effective (adj) battery (no cap) easy-to-interpret (adj) F–J high-temperature (hyphen; adj) hazardous (no cap) K–N laptop (no hyphen) O–R RDC-CI Data Logger (use the full S–U under-treatment (hyphen; adj) V-Z warranty (no capital)

term or abbreviated term consistently) Quick-Connect Flexible Hose Accessory Kit (capitalize) quick-connect (adj) software (no cap) Numbers APA format- spell out all non- statistical numbers below 10 two hoses. Measurements spell out (foot, gallon) Money Use $ and figures $650.00 Temperature Use F and C (Fahrenheit and Celsius) 40 0 F to 158 0 F (- 40 0 C to 70 0 C) Time 24 hours (not one day) two minutes (write out) Unit modifiers 0.5-gallon increments (adj) 12-month (hyphen and numeral) Six/6-foot-long (hyphens and numeral) Range 0.5–100 gallons (en dash) Style Headings and specifications Title (H1): Calibri 16 bold, centered, title case (caps on all nouns) Subheading (H2): Calibri 14 bold italics, centered, sentence case (initial caps only). Section headings and bulleted list (H3): Calibri 12 bold, align left, sentence case, no end punctuation, no space after. Ordering, accessories, and parts (H4): Calibri 11, bold, align left, sentence case, no space after. Body text: Calibri 11, 1.15 spacing, align left, no indents. Figures: Center all figures and equalize size; add labels and callouts. Figure labels: Figure 1,2.3… (Calibri 11, centered, title case) Callouts: (See Figure 1,2,3..) (Calibri 11, add parenthesis, title case) Miscellaneous Use an en dash for numerical ranges (–) Bulleted lists Begin with verbs and a capital letter; no end punctuation. One space after heading for bulleted list