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5 Things That Killed Hip Hop Analysis

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Something that affects every genre of music, and is almost always agreed upon, is the fact that music is evolving Hip-hop is no exception. Unfortunately, it is not always a whole consensus that the music comes out better. In J-Zone’s article of “5 Things That Killed Hip-Hop,” he writes with poor academic tone, atrocious grammar, and non-cohesive paragraphs structure. He tells the readers his opinions of the change in hip-hop. His argument that hip-hop is dying is legitimate, and is backed up by his statements about social media, clans in the music industry, and copyrighting. J-Zone’s article has poor academic tone in his paper. First of all, he consistently uses slang terms such as wit', doin', yo, and dope. On top of that, he is so lazy he …show more content…

For J-Zone that is not the case. When he starts a paragraph it has everything to do with his thesis statement. He goes to make an compelling point and it seems like the whole paragraph will elaborate on what his point is saying. Half way through the paragraph the point is on the other side of the planet. Nothing seems to correlate and he seems to be getting off track immensely. For example in J-Zone’s first paragraph he writes “Safety in numbers.” This paragraph is supposed to be talking about how having a crew in the music industry is what makes the money. The author goes on a rant about crews and eventually he starts talking about albums. A completely unrelated subject to the matter of having a crew. A crew from what he is writing, is a group of people collectively making music separate but also together at the exact same time, they do tours together and make each other more well known. If he wanted to talk about albums he could have done that in a different part of his thesis. “Good Albums are about a vibe.” Where is J-Zone taking us on this adventure of a blog? Not only does this happen within the first part of the the thesis but also in his other four points as well. A good writer maintains a clear focus on his thesis statement throughout the entire paper. J-Zone’s blog is not a good example of how to stay clear on your thesis

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