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How To Create Suspense In Rattarake

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RATTLESNAKE is a very compelling action-thriller with a hit of a modern western. The plot keeps the audience engaged.
The goal is clear and the stakes are deadly. The tone is gritty. There are solid themes about second chances and survival. The perceived protagonist has to overcome many obstacles to survive. There’s a feeling of a nicely crafted ticking clock tension. The action is also well constructed. There’s good visual storytelling, such as when Marcos is shot.
The script uses some of the techniques that make for a compelling thriller, including an isolated setting, being cut off from communication, the sense of being stalked, and the threat of being harmed or killed.
There’s really a lot to like about this script, but in every …show more content…

Granted, the bottle she hides in the opening is a plant that is later paid off.
Also, to make Claire a stronger character, give her more inner conflict and struggle about her stepfather and/or mother. This is touched upon, but not fully developed. In addition, give Claire a fear i.e. spiders or snakes. The snake is foreshadowed, but it’s not clearly established that this is an overwhelming fear for Claire and that she will have to overcome this fear in the climax to defeat the foe. Remember, what works best in these types of stories are when the hero or heroine has to overcome their inner fears, before they can defeat the foe. So if Claire has a strong fear of spiders or snakes, in the climax she will have to be seen overcoming this. For example, the totem that she uses to attack Ajax with might be next to a snake.
However, if indeed Hank is truly the main protagonist and hero, then set up the robbery, the digging scene and then transition directly to the ranch, revealing Hank working there. Introduce the other characters at the ranch including, perhaps even Claire as to not confuse the audience about the true protagonist. She can still be from a rehab.
Or make the scene at the rehab brief as, again, not to confuse the audience about the true protagonist.
Consider moving up the catalyst when they find Ricky’s body and then Marcos is shot. Don’t spend too much time setting up each character or this will slow the pace (examples Ricky and

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