Barbra Tomlinson's Revision As A Metaphor

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Revision as a Metaphor Have you ever given much thought about revising your paper? We correct the spelling, fix the grammatical errors, and give it one last read through then we hand it in. Revision is one of the most important pieces when writing an essay, but do we overlook it? I most certainly did until I read Barbra Tomlinson’s essay, “Tuning, Tying, and Training Texts: Metaphors for Revision”. Tomlinson opened my eyes and I see a whole new light when it comes to revising my papers.

In George Lakoff and Mark Johnson’s book, Metaphors We Live by, they express that we tend to overlook everything and not see the true identity of objects in our everyday lives. We don’t tend to look at objects as metaphors as well. Lakoff and Johnson
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She doesn’t address hiding in each metaphor. She addresses all the positives but does not include the negative perspective. There’s highlighting and hiding in every metaphor, sometimes we tend not to express every part of it. Highlighting and hiding make every metaphor stronger because it addresses both sides and clarifies it.

In Tomlinson’s essay, she talks about revision being metaphors. One of the metaphors that spoke to me was cutting. The last essay I wrote I put so much extra stuff into my paper. The paper was about metaphors for academic and non-academic reading, I told several stories in this essay that are very personal. I elaborated way too much and it became very unorganized. I conferenced with my professor and he agreed. He also told me I was trying to make the length requirement and that caused me to add excess in my paper. I decided to completely cut off my introduction because I was just trying to make my essay clearer but it just turned out to make it a tad confusing. I could relate to cutting because Tomlinson stated, “many writers report that rewrite involves removing excrescence in order to highlight or clarity important material… Cut assumes special meaning when Henry Millet (1963) tells us that he goes “to work with an axe,” or when Hugh Leonard tells us that he finds cutting difficult when he cannot get a wedge in because each line fits into the next” (68-69). She illustrates that cutting isn’t necessarily bad,

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