Brayzack Narrative

“How are you feeling?” She asks. “Okay.” I answer with every bit of energy I have left.

“No ma’am we’ll wait outside with our vehicles if it’s all the same. Captain O’Hara did tell them help would be out there no more than two hours and he would be back

My name is Zach Reid, I have just been hired on as a new DST.

The narrative of Bill Bray was encouraging and challenging; the part of the story that spoke to me the most was his interaction with the gatekeepers. Bill Bray was hired as the executive director of The Native American Preparatory School (NAPS). He often had to visit the chairman of the NAPS board at his condo. Every time he would pass the gate, he would be stopped by a series of white men, and each time he had to tell them his business. The gatekeepers would ask series of questions before they let him in; he had told the same story to the same people for two months. They would have to call and check every time before the gatekeepers can let him in. One day Bill sarcastically joked that he was a gardener as he was running late for an appointment. Surprising, the gatekeepers let him go through without asking a single question and even gave him a pass that allows him to go anywhere in the complex. This incident had a huge impact on me. Even though Bill Bray had his Ph.D and was the executive director of NAPS, white men simply saw him as a gardner. I think this is still an issue that needs to be addressed in our society. People say racism has died out, but the reality is that it is still present in every day of our lives; we see public or hidden hate crimes and stereotypes happening on campuses. The story helped me to remember that I cannot judge people by the cover.

“I hadn’t considered that, but I don’t know that I have the authority to order the Marines to escort me to Fredericks.”

“I know you’ve been waiting. How’s your health been, it looks like you haven’t been sleeping much.”

“Well, I don’t get much sleep nowadays. My job is difficult and I haven’t found the time to rest in a while. Actually, I don’t think I’ve ever

This new draft has done great work in the first act to invest our audience in the story. We like how relatable Dana’s character is from the start. The changes that were made to have her be aware of her work and have Emma be the extreme version of that type of person works really well and is a lot of fun. Also, how connected Dana is to her backstory is much stronger, which we love and will definitely keep an audience invested in her plight. The world in which she lives and works feels more realistic, and the conceivable way it has been pushed makes the comedy really strong and relatable. The thread of all the skills Dana learns along the way and how they culminate in a successful final takedown scene with the drug dealers is really cool,

"Hoseok, if you're stressed you could take a break." She says in a comforting voice.

“Um…yes. Sorry Sir but I’m a little confused. You said I’m needed in the Army?”

“Ugh, I don’t know! Can I just go to bed? I’m exhausted,” my aunt said in desperation.

“Get a good night’s sleep. We are going to leave tomorrow and you’ll need all the energy you can

The leader waved his rifle for Paul and Sherry to move. “All right. Back to the command center.”

“You’re clear but before you go, the president has ordered us to tell you about the process. Once you enter there will be four more guards that will take you each to different rooms. Nothing to be worried about but since you are still new to this we need to conduct a routine check.”

"It 's so cold and the temperature is unbearable. Ugh...I should catch my breath." He paused for more energy.