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Clarifying: Is Tess 10 Years Old?

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There are other small inconsistencies to clarify: is Tess 10 years old or 12 years old?
On page 37, it’s not clear how Edison comes up with the theory that the universes will collapse within hours. It’s an important feature of the script and generates a “ticking clock” tension, but it’s not clear how he comes up with this and the idea of the urgency would benefit from being highlighted throughout the script. Tess has to feel this urgency to fix the box, correct the universe, and find her parents.
As stated, Tess and the other characters are a bright highlight of this script. Tess is simply adorable. She does talk older than her age and this can be tedious after awhile. She’s being a grown up to hide her vulnerability. Make sure that she comes to understand that she needs …show more content…

Perhaps her mother told her a story about the great library and that it holds all the answers.
Rework the sequence when Tess is transported to the modern world. Make sure the audience clearly understands this and create more of a fish out of water.
Eliminate the dog or pay the dog off.
Consider teaming Tess up with more allies, like Tom to give them an opportunity to bond.
Elevate the sense of urgency.
Reconsider some characters like Dirk.
Reconsider the ending with Nikoleen and if that’s the best twist.
Trim narrative descriptions/dialogue.
Consider if the factory/power plants scenes are needed (slows pace).
Consider a structure similar to the film The Wizard of Oz.
Make sure to highlight the message.
The Library scene needs to be strong as this is the place she has been hoping to reach. Finding her mother should be more magical.

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The plot is very engaging.
The script feels creative, imaginative, and refreshing.
The script offers colorful and eccentric characters that can attract talent.
There are strong action sequences and visual storytelling.
The target audience is family friendly, four-quadrant.
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