Compound Sentence

Essay 1 was about a Mission Statement that I had to write for myself something personal which explains something that is truthful and explains who and what I am and what I am strving to achieve when searching my name “Brian Mamuyac”. What I did to prepare for this assignment was that our instructor gave us the prompt ahead of time and I created a rough draft and when we had to meet up in the computer room I just had to type up my essay and turn it in. The challenging part of this essay would be understanding the prompt because I had no idea what a Mission statement was and what I was supposed to do. For Essay 1 I was marked down for redundancy, repetition, grammar and spelling and also clutter. What I can do to prevent the errors in my next version would be to understand the prompt and directions more and have more ideas to write about myself.

7) Did you notice anything about the way in which this essay was written that seems to contradict essay “rules” you have been taught in the past? If so, explain

When you finish, reread the essay to check for all of the points above, and then proofread it to be sure your work does not contain errors in grammar or spelling.

The first essay that I revised was Essay 2, Analyzing an Unsustainable Practice which dealt with cell phone addiction. The main reason why I chose to revise this essay is because I feel like it is a topic that could be expanded on and many people could relate to it. Moreover, when I received the feedback on this essay, I noticed a few major and minor adjustments I could make to build on my essay. So, the major improvements I made in this essay were rearranging my paragraphs to make the essay flow smoothly, adding another paragraph explaining the development of poor communication skills, and providing examples to expand on my points that were unclear. I also made minor improvements to this essay which was making a small tweak to my thesis to make the audience understand the point I am trying to make and fixing my incorrect grammar.

The second essay I had to write was a comparative analysis. Unlike the advertisement analysis, in this essay, I had to compare two seemingly different topics. The topics were chosen for me: high school and feudalism. When assigned this essay, I was not sure what feudalism was. I did research to get an

The week 2 assignment was about informative essay, sometimes called expository essay. The purpose was to inform or educate the audience on a given topic. The essay 2 is graded and a feedback is provided, hence this after action review on my second essay to identify my strength, area of improvement, lesson and homework plan and future plan.

(B) At golf practice, I played surprisingly well. (A1) I golfed a 49, and the previous year my lowest was a 49. (F) Excited, I made plans to go golfing with my friends a few days later. (B) At the course, we began our round. (A) I was not playing well. (D) After hole 14, I began to swing my club. (C) Suddenly, I felt a pain in my upper left back. (G) To not be seen as a wimp, I tried to hide my pain from my friends. (H) However, the pain was too extreme for me to bear. (A) I told them that they would have to finish the round without me. (D) Except for Austin, everyone called me a wimp. (E) Walking, I left the course, and I traveled home. (A1) I told my mother about my injury, so she scheduled a chiropractor appointment. (E) Swinging, I felt

Joie was absent on 4 January due to ER visit the night prior. That same day thesis statements were discussed in English class and feedback given to students. The following day Joie asked Mr. Stoever how she could receive feedback on her thesis. He told Joie to email her thesis statement and he would review and give input. In addition, he handed out the checklist for the essay one day before

However, I cannot perceive your negative and positive opinions for the original essay, I think you need to mention about that!

His ability to take daily occurrences and translate them into relatable and comedic situations will have all adults laughing at their own lives. He allows the audience a peek into his personal life and the struggles he has with being a dad of boys. Whether or not the audience has children, his stories are relatable and his point of view is funny, honest, and to the point.

whatever I desired. Although all three essays had a general theme to follow, the assignments for

This essay was the one essay I had written all year outside of Dr.Kassem’s class. Since this was composed in a non-honors course, I was guided step by step and given an exact format to follow. Every student in this class had the same template to follow, therefore the writings were less-diverse. All the information I needed was given to me in a straightforward packet, and all I had to do was pick a side to argue. I can’t complain about an easy assignment, however, the effort I put into this was inadequate, yet I still received a perfect score. I really wished my teacher had challenged us more and, had given us less guidance

1. Describe some particular detail about this essay that spoke to you. Use a quote from the text, cite it, and describe an experience of your own that made you choose it.

One of the comments you made was, ‘The steps you propose are all ones I suggested in my example about changing syllabi in Renaissance literature classes. When you revise this paper, you will need to come up with a unique plan…” I was wondering could you provide me with an example on how to change my plan to make it less like yours? Lastly do you believe that making the changes on my plan to make it less like yours would defeat the purpose of the essay? If so why? If not so

3. He made sure he smiled while he spoke so that he came across well and sounded