Example Of An Essay Example

Structures the essay into paragraphs, has an introduction and a conclusion, and uses transition words

Overall, the essay seemed to lack flow as a result of a noticeable absence of transition words. The essay had bad syntax. Each paragraph seemed to be scenario after scenario and each sentence seemed to be idea after idea. For example, in the first paragraph, the list consisted of multiple sentences, instead of just one sentence with commas. “But they are few: Being mistaken for a wheat field by a cloud of locusts. Being buried alive”...“Interviews from film festivals.”, this seemed like an awful way to list ideas. In addition, the fourth paragraph of the essay was made up of only 2 sentences, one

b. Competing with different labor restrictions (or lack thereof), such as slave or child labor.

I have figured my essay out, and I hope that it is not like a “report” right now. Could you please help me to check it, and give me some other comments too?

Growing up in a small town and living on a farm teaches a young adult many skills that are useful in everyday life. Hands-on experiences, such as bailing hay or feeding the horses, develop skills in hard work and responsibility. I started working on equipment and vehicles at a young age with my father; first learning names and uses for tools, then parts to machinery. A paramount skill for working on equipment (your own or a paying customers) is determining the most economical repair. We would often use parts that were already in our garage or try to repair items that were broke to eliminate the expense of replacing the equipment. Welding was a necessity almost every time that something broke to hold the pieces back together.

Writing a captivating introduction is something I am trying to be proficient in. My instructor pointed out that I have established a clear introduction and thesis statement that laid out my purpose to the reader. That was my main objective while writing the essay 2, to be able to convey my message concisely. I am glad I did achieve that goal. My professor also, indicated that I supported the argument distinctly and effectively with my outside source in the body paragraph of my essay. Even though, I have good information and presentation in my piece, I still have area to improve.

Researching the errors in ‘section four – refining your writing’ in the unit textbook and

I need to state the literary devices in the first paragraph and not miss it. I also need to cite the texts properly. In addition to these errors, there were many parts where I had bad word choice. I only write the words down because that’s what I think fits at that moment and I do not re-read the sentence again to see if the word fits or not. This is why I had a couple problems in terms of word choice. There were also avoidable mistakes like spelling and missing literary device in the opening sentence. If I had avoided these mistakes I could have avoided the drop in my mark. Correspondingly, a big problem with form of writing was that I could not explain a lot of my points and if I cannot do that, then my essay will have weak evidence. This will simply make my essay weak overall since the point of an essay is to provide as much explanation as you can. I also have to see if the pieces of evidences that I am providing are relevant to the point that I am trying to prove, because there is no point in providing information that does not even prove the point. By doing this, there will just be extra writing. Similarly, for spelling errors, next time I should just cross out the misspelled word instead of leaving it which will just result in a lowered mark. Overall many of these mistakes could have been easily avoided by just reading over the essay and carefully looking out for any mistakes or bad word choice.

I would like to address the use of English in your essay, particularly for several incorrect spelling and grammar, which I already marked and inserted comments on your paper.

The score i received on my grammar is a 5 which means i was marred by many errors in composition, tense, subject-verb, agreement, etc. I do agree with, i know i do have consistent errors involving these titles and that's ok. They can be fixed. I just need to take a new approach the second time looking at my essay because myself reading it is not good enough. I can see certain phrases differently to a person reading it for the first time. I would be more blind to errors in my essay compared to someone reading it for the first time giving me

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Therefore, in the upcoming year, I wish to improve my grammar skills by reading more books and other essays from my peers, if they allow me to, so that I can learn how to properly apply the use to grammar and punctuation in a paragraph. Lastly, the third mistake I want to reflect on is my choices of words. As a grade 11 students, I am aware that I am required to effective words for my level in writing and I try to use as many powerful words as possible in order to fully explain my arguments. However, when I write an essay, I think of many words to use but they may not necessarily be the perfect choice for the sentence, because sometimes simpler words can be enough for the explanation. If I use difficult vocabularies, but the meaning of it is not suitable for the sentence, then this would just worsen the writing. Now that I understand how to correctly use the right vocabularies, I hope in the future the same mistake will not occur. To conclude, I have reflected upon three points in this reflection, and that is to by logical in my analysis section, my grammar skills, and the choice of

The writer has to take the standard five paragraph essay format and morph it into a more fluid structure, turning it into a beginning, middle and an end. By doing this the writer will be able to continue to direct the reader on a long and enjoyable journey.

The results of going to college the very first time vary with different people. Some people will be frightened by the way of life change, and the transition from living with family to being by their selves. On the other hand some people will be ready to move on, and to proceed with their future, and will jump at the moment to take another class that will better themselves. College will provide difficulties around every corner but will also provide the opportunities to go around those difficulties to succeed.

The qualities of a hero include selflessness, having the inspiration to be a founder and being courageous. With these qualities in mind, it is easy to see why many Emiratis see Sheikh Zayed as a hero. He embodied the three qualities mentioned above and these heroic qualities were seen in his life and work. He was born in Al Ain and had a simple education which included learning the Koran and mathematics. His education also involved activities which tested his courage such as hunting, spending long hours in the desert, often without food or water. His father was also a leader so Sheikh Zayed was also destined to become a leader. It is certain that he