Examples of Good an Bad Essays

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Sample Student Essays
Going for the Look

|On-Demand Writing Assignment |
|You will have 45 minutes to plan and write an essay on the topic assigned below. Before you begin writing, read the passage carefully and plan|
|what you will say. Explain Cohen’s argument and discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with his analysis. Support your position, |
|providing reasons and examples from your own experience, observations, or reading. Your essay should be as well-organized and carefully |
|written as you can make it.
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No, there is not a specific law saying that businesses cannot. Just because it is not illegal does not mean that it should be done. I feel that Mr. Cohen’s analysis is not correct. If a company had an extremely innovative and sought after product due to its wide range of uses and quality, the company would not need to stoop to such discriminatory hiring practices. The product would simply sell itself. After all, every company would love to get by without spending one dime on advertising. Imagine a world where everyone was hired based on merit. Productivity would increase everywhere because people would be doing what they are best at instead of just standing around and “looking great.”

Commentary

This essay illustrates the EPT Scoring Guide’s criteria for a score of 6. The superior response indicates that the writer is very well-prepared to handle college-level reading and writing. • The writer understands and focuses clearly on the topic raised by the quotation in the thesis, “… only hiring certain people that ‘look great,’ is definitely discrimination and should not occur.” • The summary of Cohen’s argument is clear and accurate, and the paraphrasing is effective. • The writer analyzes the issue of hiring for looks thoughtfully and has developed an insightful response focused on the legal implications of the practice. • The essay is coherently organized and developed with a body paragraph of analysis
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