It Ain ' T Me, Babe Is A Creative And Imaginative Broad Comedy
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IT AIN’T ME, BABE is a creative and imaginative broad comedy. The concept is fun and a nice setup for comedy, conflict, and character change. The script is driven by the theme of second chances.
There’s definitely a lot to like about this script. On the other hand, there are also areas that would benefit from more development.
First the script opens rather mildly. The idea that the music store is in jeopardy of being taken over or closed down certainly is workable, but a bit outdated, meaning this type of plot beat (being evicted etc.) has been used several times before.
Given that there’s a theme about “time” perhaps the story should begin in Dave’s past showing the end of his career with his band. This could set up his inner conflict about missing out on a more “famous” life versus being “almost” famous. Then the structure can transition to the present day storyline of him working in the record shop.
It would also be nice to set up Dave as a man that regrets some of his life decisions and wishes he could go back to the past and undo them. Right now, the scenes in the opening and with Jane simply are not the most engaging. The characters feel a bit immature and “old fashioned.”
On the other hand, the opening pages does foreshadow events with Amanda, Gary’s desire to be a manager, and the city undergoing new development in which the past seems to be disappearing.
There’s a solid and fun inciting event when Dave finds the old antique listening booth. This is the