It 's Come A Long Way From The First Draft

We were asked to write an essay that utilized literary elements to support a central idea of the text. However, while completing this assignment, I reflected on the major strides in writing I had made since the beginning of the year. In the first body paragraph of the first writing assignment of the year I use three lengthy quotes in addition to convoluted sentences such as, “Even though Jem had disobeyed Atticus, Atticus understood that what Jem did was mature and thought-out, and Atticus respected Jem’s actions.” Conversely, in the final task for The House on Mango Street, I was able to demonstrate control in my writing. I had learned to reduce the wordiness of my writing and also that complex ideas stated in simplest terms were the most enjoyable for the reader. When explaining a quote by Mamacita, I was able to be brief but poignant showing great improvement since the first essay. Within the writing assignment, I explain that Mamacita’s lack of ability to express herself is “... represented by the metaphor of the skinny thread in the form of Spanish that acts as her only road to ‘that country.’ However that thread is being torn by ‘the man’ and his belief that English is Mamacita’s present and future while Spanish is her past.” I was able to express the complex idea of the Spanish language being a part of Mamacita and not just a language, using a minimal amount of

Comments- This essay is very striking personally to me. I share some of the feeling

This is Jarmain Harrell from your English 1023 class at the North Acadian BRCC College on Tuesdays and Thursdays from 10: 30 am - 11:45 pm. I know our essay rough drafts aren’t due until Thursday but I hoped you could take a look at mine to see if I did everything correctly. I added a few things such as quotes and a couple of sentences but the majority came from the six summaries I did. Was it okay that I used a quote twice in the essay? I used it in the Introduction and reword it in the conclusion. Is are the quotes in the correct place?

My humanities semester one artifact is an essay analyzing The Narrative Life of Frederick Douglass. To begin the essay, I started by reading the book and annotating in general about slavery and its dehumanizing effect. Once I was done, I began by outlining for the prompt about the hardships Douglass faced and how he overcame them. When outlining I first thought about the subclaims that related to the prompt, then wrote a thesis that was supported and was connected to all of the subclaims. I found evidence that supported my subclaims and elaborated on how the evidence connected to the subclaim and ultimately supported the thesis. Once the outline was done, I began my first draft. The main purpose

The wording of this essay was easy to follow; she for the most part keeps on track with her thoughts. She transitions from one example to another very well and breaks her different thoughts into separate parts. The sentences are well written they were not long, but were long enough to get the point across. The

After reading over my summer assignment essay and analyzing the comments and feedback of my writing I feel that I have a lot of work to do to improve my writing as a whole. I feel I had the ideas down on what I wanted to say on my summer essay. It was just difficult expressing them in a way that was compelling enough to the reader. The topics for the essay were not challenging to me because I felt that I wrote a lot about the one I chose on alienation. Throughout my reflection I will discussed the weaknesses and strengths in my writing as well as talk about ways I feel I could improve my writing.

The essay did not come together like I would like it. I found that using quotes that are relevant to the topic can be a tough undertaking. The whole process of looking for a quote, adding the quote and then citing my quote. It completely changed the way I write, and I feel that this has been an important step in your English class. Using the library's resources to assist, helped me to learn how to synthesize, analyze and interpret information.

I learned how to write texts that demonstrate awareness of audience, purpose, and genre across multiple communities and contexts. When it came to writing our second essay, I had a hard time focusing on it. My ideas were all over the place and not clear, but when I got my graded essay back, I saw that I wasn't struggling with that. In my essay, one of my topic sentences was "People turn poverty into misogyny because they view women as an object or property." Later on in my essay, explaining Haitian women are treated like an

I loved this essay. It was beautifully written, and the voice and reading of it was equally as majestic. Each time I finished, I felt fuller, enriched.

Hello Han Low, I think your are off to a good start with what you want to revise in your essay. Transition sentences are very important in a paper, since they set-up what you will be discussing in the next paragraph. Therefore if you have a good transition then the reader will be able to follow your thought process better and in turn will be able to understand the paper better. However, you should also focus on the transitions and flow within your paragraphs as well because those are just as important as your transition sentences. Also your thought on strengthening your arguments is a very good idea because it shows that you are open to opposing ideas, rather than just saying one side or the argument. If you just showed one side the reader

With my idea in hand, and my essay waiting to be written I had set off on the journey that was writing it. The biggest challenge along the way, was to be able to muster up the motivation to continue illustrating this work of literature. Nearing the midpoint of my essay I had already felt exhausted and needed a nap, though it might have been the turkey talking, but I persevered on and pushed through until the end. Completing my goal that once seemed so difficult was greatly fulfilling and left me feeling

The prompt of the essay was open-ended, and having just read To Kill a Mockingbird for our summer assignment, we were guided in a general direction for this essay. Even though I had a very good understanding of the novel, I reverted back to my old habits of paraphrase and generalizations, unsure how to relate what I knew about the book to a more abstract topic. Comparing this essay to the other two, which were written about midway through the trimester, the growth in my thinking and writing skills is evident. Although these essays have not yet reached my full potential, they are extremely reflective of my learning in the course so far. I have become a more analytical thinker, and am grasping the skill of reading a piece with much more purpose, rather than just for what is said. My skill of writing itself has not gotten any better, but because my thinking has become more advanced, what I can write has become better. The process of improving my thinking has even lead me to learn the best way in which I learn: by doing. The many practices of annotating short stories and poems and looking for specific meanings behind each helped me tremendously, and has taught me that I will learn best by struggling through something and repeating it over and over until I begin to grasp the

When I first thought about this writing assignment I found it relatively straightforward and thought I would be able to construct my essay in no time. However, when I sat down to write my essay, I came to realize that this assignment was very thought-provoking unlike some assignments where you can talk nonsense as long as it is coherent. I had so many people in mind about who had influenced my slight interest in writing. Then to concentrate and elaborate an essay on one individual was difficult because I found this assignment more as a short discussion topic.

I've been waiting awhile to write this piece of non-fiction-- and it's some of my most personal writing-- hence the reason it took me so long to put on paper. Mainly, this piece is a reflection: who I was growing up, in my young adult years and who I am now. It explores how quickly one can change and how certain issues take precedence when they never mattered before. These issues have to do with race, my own meaning of whiteness and how I've come face to face with these discoveries.

In class we read “Wild Animals Aren’t Pets” by Zuzana Kukol, an editorial with many interesting incidents of bad happenings with animals and humans. The editorial helped provide evidence for my essay. However, having to put it into words to support my ideas was still complex for me to do because somethings I did not understand . The writing standards were challenging