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JUST ONE DRINK is an intriguing, seductive thriller. The script is driven by themes about evil, revenge, redemption, and forgiveness. It explores the idea that one can never escape their past.

While there are engaging elements of the script with a potentially complex character in the role of Tamara, overall the script would benefit from more development, especially in the area of structure, pace, tension, as well as further character development.

First, the story opens in the past to set up the backstory. It’s a creative choice to do this, but not essential. The backstory can be revealed through dialogue or through the grandmother’s journal. Consider instead opening up with Tamara seducing or luring a susceptible man to her home. Then …show more content…

She has the potential of being a very complex and fascinating character (like in FATAL ATTRACTION or BASIC INSTINCT), but this will require more development. At the end, she acts like she has genuine feelings about Steve, but it’s not convincing.
As mentioned, Tamara and Steve also share no real chemistry with each other and their relationship is never believable.

Steve could have been a more effective and likable character, but he also turns sadistic when he enjoys killing Andrei versus struggling with his moral dilemma. He essentially turned into a sadistic criminal, like the man he hates. The audience never feels empathy for Steve or cares for him. It should be noted that it could have been a powerful character study of watching Steve change from passive to aggressive if this were really his story.

Andrei could be a more deceptive charmer. Why he’s speaking at the school isn’t convincing. He really never says anything that warrants him speaking to a classroom. Elevate his dialogue to be sharper and wittier. His dialogue sounds too forced and contrived in the opening scene when he explains why he’s sadistic. There’s too much

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