Jarmain Harrell North Acadian Analysis

The best aspects from my essay were the intro and the use integrating quotes in the essay. I believe that the intro was one of the best part because it followed the parts of a inverted pyramid and that it grabs the reader and makes them want to read more. In the essay when it states “Everyone has one dream or goal in life and there are certain characteristics one must possess to achieve that dream, but things might get in the way of being able to achieve that dream”, it makes people think how is the american dream not achievable and what are the characteristics needed to try to achieve the dream. This makes the reader want to continues to read. The use of intergrading quotes was another thing that stood out in my essay. In examples such as, “At Rene’s school his class is sharing what they want to be when they are older and Rene shares with the class that he would like to be an astronaut or an actor or a magician. His teacher responds to what he said

I think my performance on the essay was good, but lacking in various areas. In the second body paragraph, my quote selections was not very strong and the lead-in sounded more like narration instead of an introducion to a quote. My commentary was a restatement of the evidence, which made it the weakest block in the entire essay. However, I do think that my paragraphs stayed on topic, even when the quotes were not as thorough as it could be. My rebuttal only contained one textual evidence, which can be improved, It also lacked some organization when it stated the evidence. I did not used “you” in any part of the essay, which was intentional. I also made sure that I was addressing the audience in a respectful way.

Overall, the essay seemed to lack flow as a result of a noticeable absence of transition words. The essay had bad syntax. Each paragraph seemed to be scenario after scenario and each sentence seemed to be idea after idea. For example, in the first paragraph, the list consisted of multiple sentences, instead of just one sentence with commas. “But they are few: Being mistaken for a wheat field by a cloud of locusts. Being buried alive”...“Interviews from film festivals.”, this seemed like an awful way to list ideas. In addition, the fourth paragraph of the essay was made up of only 2 sentences, one

In order to complete this assignment I first had to create a script. It took us a while to make the script because we weren't sure on what to do the essay on. After about two or three days of debating on what to do we decided

Though one cannot yet tell if Walton’s mission will benefit himself or society, he seems to think that it will. Obviously, he has a passion for his exploration of the north that shines through in some of the other letters he writes to his sister as well as this particular quote. He has already worked towards his goal and continues to, it seems, based on how he describes himself early on in the letters. If his mission to the north is successful, his discoveries there may be good for mankind if he finds something interesting or even useful. Additionally, Walton shows that he is different than other people because of his desire to explore, as that desire “hurries me out of the common pathways of men”, which might award him a normal life but not

Can anyone of you please correct my essay for grammar/spelling check and also contents? go hard on me please... thank you

(Note: Grading criteria for Part B and C: You may write and structure your essay any way you’d like, but it should be in narrative form (not simply listing). An excellent essay is one that presents a clearly written, well-organized, thoughtful discussion of the given question, follows the

Since the beginning of this semester, English 101 has helped me realize both my strengths and weaknesses as a writer. One weakness that I have realized about myself is my tendency to not fully plan out my essays before I start writing the rough drafts. This is one thing that English 101 has helped me to improve, by creating well-planned out outlines before starting to write. A strength that I have is writing strong commentary that supports the provided quote and shows why the quote is relevant to the essay’s overall thesis.

It’s my pleasure to be your partner and write this letter to have a review for your essay. I wish I could give you some useful advice that help you review and revise the essay.

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My vocabulary was also relatively good, though it could have been better. I am especially proud of the use of the word ‘mundane’. The my organization was deliberate, there were only two body paragraphs instead of three, and my organization was designed around my incorrect claim. My writing was fluid, but not as fluid as it could have been. A variance in sentence starters would have greatly helped the fluidity of this essay. My voice is present throughout the essay, but it does not resonate confidence. I gave myself a 2 because my “ideas are presented with little clarity, organization, or support from the passage.” The passage was not meant to support my claim about the usage of conflict and characterization, and thus my ideas cannot be supported by the passage. Also, my analysis was “partial, unconvincing, or irrelevant,” as my analysis reflected the irrelevant claim. I did “ignore how Lawrence employs literary devices,” since there is no mention of any literary device in my essay. However, I did not give myself a 1 because I do feel like there was a partially “coherent discussion of the passage,” something a 1 would not

However, I cannot perceive your negative and positive opinions for the original essay, I think you need to mention about that!

Overall, essay #2 went rather smoothly. As I sat there to type the paper I felt like I never would run out of words to type, or ideas, examples, and events of the Civil Rights Movement. This essay worked so well because the topic that the paper was on is one that has various examples to back up my opinion. There are endless examples on how racism and discrimination still exist in society today. All over the news and the internet you see multiple events of hate crimes and racism, and this proves that this problem is still very apparent in today’s society. In the future when working on an essay of this magnitude, I need to give myself more time to work on it. I believe that my essay accurately reflects the point I was trying to make, and with small improves that my paper could have been brought to the next level.

In this essay, my goal was to create a well written and formatted Critical Analysis essay where I would introduce an argument and use evidence to support my position. I also had to include a counterclaim in order to argue anything that went against my position on the topic, as well as viewing the effectiveness of using strong sources that would support my writing. The only reason I was motivated to write this essay was because it was mandatory for my FIQWS class. I hope to accomplish an essay where I include a clear argument and is well supported by my evidence; and hopefully connect back with my thesis

In order to provide you with some constructive advice, I have come up with a number of helpful tips for you so that you will be able to improve your essay. To keep away from unintentional plagiarism, document all of your sources and quotations while doing your research. You can either use the exact quote or you can put it into