My Personal Peer Review

Overall, the essay seemed to lack flow as a result of a noticeable absence of transition words. The essay had bad syntax. Each paragraph seemed to be scenario after scenario and each sentence seemed to be idea after idea. For example, in the first paragraph, the list consisted of multiple sentences, instead of just one sentence with commas. “But they are few: Being mistaken for a wheat field by a cloud of locusts. Being buried alive”...“Interviews from film festivals.”, this seemed like an awful way to list ideas. In addition, the fourth paragraph of the essay was made up of only 2 sentences, one

Furthermore, I think the strength of my essay was my thesis and supporting ideas of the

Throughout this semester we have had to write many types of essays. Although this is a college English class there is still room for improvement. I made much improvement during the semester of the class. I was able to identify my weaknesses. I learned how to make improvements to the areas I was having problems in. Although each essay we did was different I was able to begin with one essay and throughout the semester turn it into two other essays. I was able to change my style of writing to fit the type of audience I was working with. I will continue to work on my writing and keep improving it.

I need my paper to be easy to read, so I applied all these tools. The more I revised my writing, the more grammatical errors I corrected. After the first draft correction, I learn there were words I took for granted and used them in my essay that had a completely different meaning. I made generalized statements and did not attach much evidence to support most of the claims I noted in my writing. To improve my writing, I search the Internet to note other people’s remarks about these essays. Since I did not want to be embarrassed in front of my classmate for use of grammar, I had to read more to write more clearly. I did not like the peer review because it will allow my classmates to see my grammatical errors and would think of me to be a horrible English language person. But because of these peer reviews, I tried to make my text simple so that everyone could read and understand my writing.

Considering that I demonstrated proper usage of quotes, and wrote a decent hook that could grab an audience’s attention. Also, I connected every paragraph, so that the paragraphs could be cohesive and understand by the reader. Not only that, I have finally written a thesis statement that was backed up with the quotes. Although, I did notice that my grammar and punctuation were a bit off, and I forgot to describe the fear that females displayed and how it’s seen today in modern society. Which wasn’t too bad; nonetheless, I felt that I needed to improve these two aspects, if I wished to succeed in English

Lastly, self-evaluation is a key component to writing an effective essay. Even though I was able to have student feedback for my essays; self-evaluation is important for me to be able to determine my strengths and weaknesses in my writing. After composing each essay I was required to compose a self-evaluation. The evaluations describe what I consider the strong points in the essay, and were I felt I still needed to

This is a reflection of my essay from module four where we did a peer review and feedback on our essay. I found this to be a really helpful and great assignment. It gave us an opportunity to have a peer doing the same type of essay give an outside view point. The feedback that I took into consideration from my peer was very valuable. I did not have a strong enough opposing viewpoint providing a negative view on censorship or a positive view of free speech. This was very good feedback and I feel that my peer definitely took the time to break down my essay and gave a great review. This was such an important part of the persuasive essay that the need to make sure I had a strong counter argument was important.

Rhetorical Analysis: This being the first paper I wrote for you, it turned out to be utter garbage. This was my worst essay because I was overconfident in my own writing ability and didn’t think I had much room to improve on. At the time I felt like it was a top notch essay, but I have recently gone back and reread it only to notice it as choppy and stale to read. Then the paper was riddled with comma splices, even after you did a lesson going over how to fix them. It wasn’t out of spite that I kept repeating these mistakes, but instead it was just ignorance on the matter. It was my goal coming out of that essay to fix those errors and while not perfect, I feel I have improved in my awareness of the problem. This paper taught me a great deal on how to think more critically about situations. This new mindset directly came into play in the second essay. I learned my greatest lesson from this paper. I have so much room for improvement. Now that I can see more of my errors I can continue to improve and move forwards with my writing abilities.

My literary analysis piece helped me noticed the mistakes I was making and made me really look at how I could change my writing for the future. Personally, when I finished my writings I felt very proud of the final piece. This was one that I felt proud about and thought it was overall a well written paper, until I received the grade and all

Another error of my writing process was not having a clear and specific thesis statement. I would often combined to many thoughts and ideas all in one sentence, which made it very difficult for readers to understand my main argument. For example, in my fourth essay about performance-enhancing drugs, my thesis “Athletes are constantly recognizable to the public eye; their actions can affect the children and adults for whom they serve as role models, which is why many athletes depend on the use of performance-enhancing drugs to better their performance,” was very vague and was not the main focal point of the essay which it should have been. In recent years prior, I never had any problems trying to convey my message or point. College was entirely a different league. My professor suggested that I read other research papers to better understand how my thesis should sound and be constructed. My professor then told me that I needed to add that explanation into the paragraph so the reader can understand exactly what I am trying to get across with

I then learned that after I submitted my assignment both to the instructor and class peers that I should never second guess myself after I have submitted my assignment. After submitting my assignment I reviewed several different peers’ reviews of my writing assignment and found that my peers may have not understood what my thesis was in the writing,

I think self-reflection, or a careful cogitation of one’s personal work, is very important. It will help me think about my strengths and weaknesses in my writing skills and learning process, so that I can improve my weaknesses in the future and become a better writer. I believe, I have many strengths and many weaknesses that can be seen transparently through my drafts, revisions, and final essays, or writings, this semester. My overall strength includes the ability to pick out good examples from articles and the ability to construct good development of my body paragraphs after my revisions. On the other hand, my overall weakness includes having some unclear explanation of thoughts, unclear topic sentences, confusing thesis statements, having undefined terms, difficulties transitioning from one idea to another. I have learned that to have a good essay, I must revise my papers more than once because there are always flaws that can be fixed or improved. My writing process has evolved from having difficulties writing down or explaining my thought process to being able to explain and clarify examples to help support my thesis statement.

Mostly I struggled with the MLA format, using multiple source , and my thesis statements. For example, in essay 3 my thesis statement was “In society, it has been a cultural idea for years that females cannot do male things.” I could have made that better and told a story to have the reader more excited about hearing what I was going to say next. The things that came easily to me are the body paragraphs, organization structures, supporting details, using correct grammar, and my conclusions. For example, in essay 1 my conclusion said “All in all, I feel as if the word holds a certain importance to me now that I use it so much. I don’t like anybody outside my friend group to use it the way we use it because I feel we should always claim ownership to the way it’s used right now. There are some people outside of my friend group that has caught onto it and now use it daily, but as long as they know who originated the way it is used I guess it will be fine. My friends and I are just different in a way where we don’t do what everyone else is doing and like to start stuff on our own for each other to use or benefit from. We are pretty far from normal, but we just like to set trends and not follow the trend. I believe that is what will lead us to the path of success in the future.” I feel I do a good job wrapping everything up I talked about in the essay and provided a good closure for my audience. After being in English 151 I have gotten better at realizing my

I provided a lot of detail and I feel that it delivered my message. This essay was also The easiest because , I just had to write about me no research was necessary. Which is what made writing this essay fun. In the prewriting stage of this essay i got my ideas in bullet points before getting started. In the first draft writing process i chose to use a brainstorm chart to outline my essay before I typed up my first rough draft. During the diting process i got suggestions from my peers on what my essay was missing or what I could improve on. I take all my suggestions and I improve my writing from my rough draft to my final

The first essay was a persuasive essay on the right for gays/lesbians to marry. I believe that my first essay could have been a lot better. I think if I had based my paper on the topic sentences that I put together in the outline my paper would have been a lot better than