Penn Foster Paper

3653 WordsNov 21, 201215 Pages
Attitude I am really unsure about having to take an English composition course because I am not a writer and the field I am studying for is not one that I would have to write for. I am going to put my all into completing this course to the best of my ability. My plan is to be able to strike a good balance between this class and others that are more in line with my field of study. My hope is that I do not get an apathetic attitude towards the course as the curriculum goes on. Inventory Working through the inventory, I realized that there are things I need to work on to become a better writer. It also showed me that being able to write well will be…show more content…
The paragraphs are also very choppy and need to be revised to flow much better. Evidence The evidence used in this essay is good, but the writer does seem to be putting words in grandparents’ mouths. While it may be true that most grandparents would prefer a written letter or crayon-drawn picture, how does the writer know this for a fact? He or she needs to back this up with some kind of proof. Is there a survey of grandparents somewhere that backs this up? Perhaps the writer should do a survey of grandparents and report the results to back up the evidence. Organization While the essay does seem to be in good logical order, it definitely still needs some revision. There don’t seem to be any transitions used in the essay which can easily confuse a reader. Ideas seem to run together and the paper becomes chaotic, especially towards the end when the writer talks about the “mass destruction” a wrong click can cause. Use of transitions will definitely make this essay more readable. Narration I. Scene a. My apartment b. Grocery store (job) c. School i. Classrooms ii. Professor
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