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Personal Narrative: My Multimodal Project

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I choose to incorporate my multimodal project because it shows that I can think outside the box and find small ways to make society better. Using rhetorical purpose, critical thinking, and what audience I am conveying to is more amplified in this paper. During peer reviews, I narrowed down my topic and determined the medium in which I wanted to convey the information through. I had many ideas, by talking with other people I came down to conducting an experiment on myself. For the teacher review, the biggest thing I changed was the third audience. I narrowed it down to a single group rather than leaving it open to society. This project has a higher meaning than the basic ideas of a clean room and it pertains to people in college. In college, …show more content…

I am not the most comfortable or best at writing about my experiences or feelings. I feel that this was a challenge because I felt weird showing most type of vulnerability in my writing. My goal for this piece was to shadow the concept that animals don’t have a voice, they get put into situations based on their owners, especially when it comes out to health. In those situations, there are times when there’s no right answer based on ethics. It was extremely hard to put those ideas in there without flat-out stating it. After the all the revisions, if a reader truly dived into the story they should find that theme. The biggest thing I changed in my writing was word choice, I wanted the paper to flow and feel natural to me. By doing so the paper felt more right to me and seemed to show the story in a new, ordered light. I believe through all the peer edits, it has created a better voice in my paper. Overall, the paper seemed to grow in more way then one over the many …show more content…

I had many issues finding creditable sources that flowed with my original topic on castoruem. There’s so much different kinds of information on it, it was hard to narrow it down to one central idea. When I first wrote the paper, it was a mess. There was not really any organization, or flow to the paper, and it didn’t really make sense. For the teacher revision, I fixed a good portion of that issue, but it wasn’t all the way there yet. In order to fix that issue, I attempted to do this by focusing on a single paragraph as a whole and making sure it related back to that central theme. Another issue I had was having my sources drive my paper because I was not complete sure what I wanted this paper to say. I fixed this by introducing the author and focusing on my ideas. With the topic I have chosen, I think that I had a good idea on where I wanted to go, but the sources shook my ideas and lost me in my own paper. In the paper, my critical thinking relies on the ideas that people do not know what is in their food and companies are allowed to cover it up with different word choices. This time in editing my paper, I tried to be very aware of the who my audience was and my purpose in the paper. From end to finish, this piece has been the most reviewed and fixed out of everything I have written this

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