Personal Statement: Proficiency Improvement

Could you please make the amendments, remove my highlighted text, proof read and spell check your work and re-submit this unit by 19/10/15.

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Proficient 42.5 (17%) points: Nice section! You make several good point here. They support your overall thesis of your paper. There could have been some more support for some of your points. Also, you have a sentences I point out in the paper that leads to some confusion. Nice section.

These are the skills and competencies I have learned through my studies at Walden University. Kaslow, Grus, Campbell, & Fouad, et al. (2009) stated professionalism comes from my respect for those who need help. Integrity can be built with confidence in the therapist. Attitudes are charitable, polite, caring emotions toward others that fuel my motivation toward helping. This concern welfare of others comes from my religious and personal experiences as a child and young adult.

To tell you truth my paper feedback was not so helpful. Whoever looked my paper pointed out some of my grammar errors but nothing more than that. There is no helpful comment or positive negative words or any constructive idea or thoughts. I guess my paper make sense then. You haven’t comment on our paper yet so I have no idea where I have to improve. Final paper is not due until next week so if you are still planning to give some feedback, that would be great. I can still modify my paper and submit the perfect one like you want to see in any paper.

Can you please review it by tomorrow (3/24) if possible and let us know if you have any feedback or changes.

The CFSC support plan that I developed for this course is about helping children that live in poverty. My support plan has powerful attributes that helps children and their parents that live in poverty. While revising my support plan I looked over my overall plan and the individual components that make up the entire support plan and I have confidence that my plan could be implemented into reality so that they could help children that live in poverty. The areas that could use improvement in my support plan are adding the appendix from Community part 2, adding the system evaluation, removing the italicized in the paper and fixing grammar issues. Another area that needs improvement is that the Community part 3 needs more detail into the actual project, looking over the steps into the plan and including more detail into how these steps can become a reality and how it helps children that live in low incomes. The last item that needed improvement was that my table of contents needs to reflect all components in my CFSC support plan and I need to research how to use the table of content function in Microsoft Word. Overall my support plan has many activities and strategies that help children that live in poverty overcome of the obstacles that affect them.

Overall I did a good job. I would recommend a little tutoring when writing my papers or someone to proof read.

I want to apologize for this paper being so late. I had the date written down in my planner as it due on the 25 not the 22. But that is no excuses, I should have payed more attention. Anyway the link to up load to document on blackboard is no longer available. so I attached the document here. If you reopen the document on blackboard I can upload it there if that would be easiest for you. Sorry for all the trouble.

Finally, I am most indebted to my thesis committee who played a major role in

Paper 1 when grading paper 1 aspect 1, reflection, in this paper I felt it exhibited a high degree of self-reflection, the writer had thought again about what their MTBI profile was and actually retaken the quiz, in my opinion it was very well done, the English used was again exceptional in my opinion and so I marked aspect 1 excellent.

I gave the discussion and conclusion sections to a co-worker to review. She stated that I was repeating a specific word throughout these sections. She also stated that I needed to make some grammar corrections. I made these corrections as suggested. I will also be re-reading the rest of the papers to make sure I made the corrections suggested by my peers from class. Making sure the headings and subheadings are in the right place and done per APA style.

My signature indicates that this document represents my own work. Excluding shared data, the information, thoughts and ideas are my own, except as indicated in the references. I have submitted an electronic copy through Balckboard to be scanned by TurnItIn.com. In addition, I have not given aid to another student on this assignment.

Special thanks are due to Lecturer, [Prof. A Srikanth] the Mentor of the project for guiding and correcting various documents of ours with attention and care. He has taken pain to go through the project and make necessary correction as and when needed.

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