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Questions On Literacy Devices

Decent Essays

Hi Dennise,
This is my response.
1) THESIS
a) Does the thesis make an arguable claim (stating an idea and its significance)?
Yes

b) Explain one strength about the thesis.
It clearly states the literacy device ‘metaphor’ that will be used, and the reason why the poet chooses to use this.

c) Explain one aspect to be improved about the thesis. (Replies like, "Nothing needs improvement" are not acceptable. There is always something that can be improved.)
My advice should be adding an additional literacy device to analyze, but yours is great if you are going to dig deep into metaphors.

2) BODY PARAGRAPHS
Body Paragraph #1:
a) Does the paragraph have a clear topic sentence that tells you what the point of the paragraph is? Provide feedback.
I can’t find the tropic sentence which is usually the first line of the body paragraph. My advice is not to put evidences in the tropic sentence since it will give the readers a hard time. …show more content…

Has the writer introduced and integrated the quotation well? Provide feedback.
Yes. I find a great use of quotations. I think you could use more introductory phrases before quotations relating the thesis with quotations.

c) Does the paragraph contain an analysis that explains how the quotation supports the point presented in the topic sentence? Provide feedback.
Yes. Analysis comes before or after quotations and it supports the point fairly well if I look at the very first line as a tropic sentence. My feedback is putting more analysis to the last quotation since I think it is a great passage from the poem probably where Shelley’s idea changes.

d) Explain one strength about the body paragraph.
Great use of

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