Reflection Of A Persuasive Reflection

While I appreciated that one of my peers provided feedback on my work, I feel that the feedback that was provided did not fulfill the assignment. My peer did not provide detailed feedback on my paper that could be adequately incorporated in my review and revisions. Most of the information that was provided as feedback were simply statements that reiterated what the prompt question was. Please see the below feedback provided to me by my peer.

First, the essay is well constructed because Mae explains the issue and opposing positions clearly and in an engaging way. Mae includes quotes from articles and explains them thoroughly to show their relevance to the

Reflection: The hardest thing on this essay was finding good examples that could really illustrate the examples above. For working in this essay I did a short brainstorm for getting good ideas. Then, I made an outline and started doing the draft version. Then I got the feedback from my teacher and wrote down the final version. For getting advice, I showed every step for my teacher and also for my friends, for getting a good peer review and good advices. The best advice I got was one of my teacher, when I was making the outline, when he told me to change the

I need my paper to be easy to read, so I applied all these tools. The more I revised my writing, the more grammatical errors I corrected. After the first draft correction, I learn there were words I took for granted and used them in my essay that had a completely different meaning. I made generalized statements and did not attach much evidence to support most of the claims I noted in my writing. To improve my writing, I search the Internet to note other people’s remarks about these essays. Since I did not want to be embarrassed in front of my classmate for use of grammar, I had to read more to write more clearly. I did not like the peer review because it will allow my classmates to see my grammatical errors and would think of me to be a horrible English language person. But because of these peer reviews, I tried to make my text simple so that everyone could read and understand my writing.

As a “Advanced Placement” student during high school much of my time was spent writing essays on various topics and challenging prompts. Many of my essays centered around structuring supportive arguments to push or pull the audience in my direction of belief. Writing a persuasive essay often included looking for multiple supportive cases, choosing two or three that best “pushed” my view, and including these real world cases and examples throughout my essay to help “build” my case.

I am able to use evidence to back up my ideas and prove my point. My writing this year has helped me grow in this area. I have learned about the different types of claims, like claim of value, fact, and policy, and different methods of arguing, like induction and deduction. I have used all of these techniques throughout my writing. When I am struggling with a prompt, like for my quotation essay, I look at it like an argument. This helps me make my purpose clear. A good example of my strength of argumentation is my paper on why schools should not have letter grades. In this essay, I used points and evidence to argue my claim. I also used a deductive method, meaning that I started with an observation and worked my way to a conclusion. This allowed me to effectively argue my claim and use evidence to support it. I know that I am good at writing an argumentative piece and I believe that it is my biggest

The revision process for me was difficult. It was difficult because I thought that my ideas were clearly stated and organized. However, that was not the case. There were sections in which the language of my essay made the ideas that I was trying to convey disorganized. Other times I had too much going on and had to slow down the pace of the essay. In brief there were errors within my essay, therefore I needed to make revisions to improve the quality. There were many changes/revisions that I made. Firstly, I omitted a paragraph in which I made a relation to 187 Reasons Why Mexicans Can’t Cross The Border. Though it had good content in regards to identity, I realized that it threw off the idea of a close reading. The objective of this assignment

This is a reflection of my essay from module four where we did a peer review and feedback on our essay. I found this to be a really helpful and great assignment. It gave us an opportunity to have a peer doing the same type of essay give an outside view point. The feedback that I took into consideration from my peer was very valuable. I did not have a strong enough opposing viewpoint providing a negative view on censorship or a positive view of free speech. This was very good feedback and I feel that my peer definitely took the time to break down my essay and gave a great review. This was such an important part of the persuasive essay that the need to make sure I had a strong counter argument was important.

When you write a persuasive essay, it’s good to think about how you will construct your argument, from the way you will organize your key points to how and where you will disprove opposing views. A lot of students find it hard to identify what it is that makes a good piece of essay writing. At the core of such writing, it is the nature and structure of the intellectual argument.

In looking back on the three essays that I wrote this semester, I did notice several changes and improvements in

The main reason why I chose to revise this essay was because it was one of my lowest essay grades, so I knew I could find my mistakes and make this essay stronger. Furthermore, after I looked at the feedback that was given to me, I realized I could fix the errors that affected my grade. The major improvements I made in this essay was making my introduction more clear by making it easier to understand what my topic was about and relatable. I also made changes to my conclusion because I did not think it summarized my body paragraphs and was not developed enough. Lastly, the minor changes I made in this essay was providing examples to support the points that I made and to make them

The hardest part for me was staying under the 600 word limit, I had to learn how to crunch my ideas more directly and take out all the unecesarry details and ideas. One thing I learned in this english class is to start with an outline. Due to the fact that I did start with an outline I had all my ideas down on paper, this helped me pinpoint which ideas were the most persuasive and important. I chose to write my opinion piece on if NASA should get more funding from the federal budget. Once everyone finished their drafts, we had peer groups look over it. I got positive feedback but I still was over my word limit. My group helped me decide the least effective idea and what I could add in replace and how to make it more persuasive. From writing this type of paper I learned how to be more persuasive and how to better distinguish between good ideas and great

One weakness I have is lack of wordiness, which is evident in my narrative essay. “Over the summer, I went on a trip to Yellowstone, Wyoming with thirty-eight other teenagers” (Narrative 1). In my narrative essay, I struggled with word count, and this sentence is overly wordy and doesn’t get to the point. In some of my essays, I tended to repeat things and put unnecessary details, something I hope to improve on next year. Another weakness I have is mechanical structure, which was not well developed in my persuasive essay. “While some people that use marijuana recreationally end up developing mental illnesses, this is not the case for users of medical marijuana” (Persuasive 3). This sentence is just one example of a time that one of my sentences can sound too clunky and hard to understand. I also have had punctuation and grammar mistakes in many of my essays, which I hope to eliminate next

After the first draft, one of the most important areas that I needed to improve was the analysis and finding better evidences for my point that I have made in my essay. The reason I had to go through struggle finding evidences in my first draft was because my thesis was not clear which made it hard to show my point in it. After the first draft, I was able to find some convenient sources that are related to my topic which helped me to support my point and made me have a better analysis on those points. However, I believe my analysis is somewhat effective as it should be according to the rubric after my final draft has been done, but there are still some places in the essay where I feel like it can still be improved. I tried my best to improve it as best as I can to make it clear to the audience by expanding more on it by giving more detailed about the points that I have made in the essay. However, I definitely learned how making my analysis more specific helped me a lot to make my essay clearer than being vague and general. After reviewing my Rhetorical Analysis, I definitely learned how doing a better research on my topic makes my argument

In my essay, I should have used supporting details instead of repeating the same sentence in different words. I also should have eliminated the empty words I used and replaced them with words that had stronger meaning. Lastly,