Smarthinking: A Peer Review

This essay is a persuasive opinion essay the word choice the author uses is all to make the reader agree with him. Some examples of where word choice has a particular effect in the essay can be found throughout the essay. The first example can be found in the first paragraph in the first sentence,

When trying to fight a point the author has to be persuasive and state facts, they can’t just go off of how they feel. In Colleen Wenke’s persuasive essay, “ Too Much Pressure” she explains why cheating is a huge problem in the United States because children don’t see it as a problem. Colleen Wenke effectively displays the three main parts of a persuasive essay, which are claims, evidence, and assumptions.

In his essay, Kessel has both strengths and weaknesses in his writing. Some strengths are that Kessel uses lots of evidence and with insightful details. Some weaknesses though are his faulty logic and exaggeration. Overall, in Kessel’s essay, the strengths won over the weaknesses creating an effective persuasive essay.

8. I was able to gather relevant information through the writing of my persuasive essay. I was able to use advanced searches to gather information for the writing of this essay. I was also able to take this information and integrate it into a five page

For your assignment this week, construct a paper that provides an in-depth analysis of the three parts of persuasion. Address the following points in your paper:

Power, a tool, a quality, an influence over others, in other words, a sense of control. In relation to this, those that are given or even earned a great amount of power should use it moderately. In the world we live in today, many “leaders” use their power negatively, resulting in unfairness to others.

After reflecting upon my 30 minute writing submission, I do not believe I wrote a very convincing or persuasive argument. While reading through my paper, I recognized a few rhetorical appeals, however I do not believe I used them very effectively.

He remains focused on his topic and his language flows well throughout the essay. This essay he has wrote came over very persuasive. It is because he gives many examples to back up his theory. He likewise states examples that evaluates have said in regards to TV and how they are to blame for being a bad impact on kids. Yet he bear in these examples how evaluates have been proven as wrong.

This is echoed by Faulkner & Squillante (2016), who reflect on the power of research to enhance veracity. The reviewer noted a section of my speech which referred to roads, slogans and posters. To improve, I could have researched real world examples of street names, slogans and features of posters. Including these examples would strengthen credibility and appeal through ethos. Following the paragraph task, I applied this suggestion by researching the feedback process, which helped inform the Review Task. Specifically, I referenced Fregeau (1999), Frodesen (2001), Williams (2003) and Weaver (2006), whose research into the provision of feedback and the peer review process, helped inform my decision to offer verbal, as well as written feedback to my partner.

My academic writing has greatly improved. I now make an active effort to use a thesaurus to vary my language. I also incorporate more transitional phrases to create a better flow in my essays. I organize my paragraphs to make sure the information and supporting evidences flows well. Even though I understood my claims and thesis needed to be supported by credible sources I analyze who and where the source was published. Specifically, the class discussion in the response to videos we watched two videos about high fructose corn syrup. I stated,” The first video, High Fructose Corn Syrup (HFCS) – ‘Party’ TV original commercial, is an advertisement made by The Corn Refiners Association”. I acknowledged that the first video was made by an association that could have biased opinions about high fructose corn syrup. By acknowledging where the source came from I demonstrate that if this video was used for evidence for safe fructose consumption it would not be a credible source because of its ties to the corn association.

This is a reflection of my essay from module four where we did a peer review and feedback on our essay. I found this to be a really helpful and great assignment. It gave us an opportunity to have a peer doing the same type of essay give an outside view point. The feedback that I took into consideration from my peer was very valuable. I did not have a strong enough opposing viewpoint providing a negative view on censorship or a positive view of free speech. This was very good feedback and I feel that my peer definitely took the time to break down my essay and gave a great review. This was such an important part of the persuasive essay that the need to make sure I had a strong counter argument was important.

I felt that this essay was quite persuasive, not in the way an essay usually, making the reader agree with you, but instead persuaded me to look further into the issue and form my own opinion. I felt her technique of remaining neutral and providing facts was wise to achieve her goal and was a welcome change from the typical pushy one sided political writings that are common nowadays.

After reviewing the Smarthinking feedback, I intend to make the use of the ideas offered to structure and strengthening my arguments by using claims that can support my writing as well as acknowledging the views to enhance my writer’s credibility. According to Booth, Colomb, and Williams (2008), “some writers fail to acknowledge alternatives because they can’t think of any…others can think of views to acknowledge, but fear that if they do, they weaken their argument” (p. 146). In other words, when a writer is able to acknowledge objections and finding alternative to fix his or her paper, it would be easier to express them. I will continue to use evidence and reasons to support my argument in my program and also in my professional life when

This lacked the proper structure and additional information needed, such as diagraming your argument, proposing possible loopholes, and finding possible fallacies. All of these being essential components in the completion and accuracy of an acceptable critical evaluation, which I made sure to include in my present updated assessment. Diagraming is crucial to understanding and assessing an argument. Unlike in my original evaluation, it allowed me to really analyze all the evidence in the editorial. It did this by making me search through the article and find what evidence is actually essential to the primary argument

Upon reviewing the feedback from smart thinking, I come to realize that my persuasive essay is missing significant influence sentences, although, the information is there, it seems more like just a report document rather than trying to convince an audience about my point of view. Valerie from Smart thinking said “You use transitional words and phrases like “first of all,” “secondly,” “thirdly” and “lastly” to guide your reader from one topic to the next. Well done!” however, is not enough to grab his/her attention. Consequently, what surprise me the most about the peer review is that, the main part of this essay was omitted, when I read the persuasive essay, it sounded convincing and interesting to me nevertheless that was not the case. Another