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An emotionally and physically tortured teenage girl must find a way to survive the abuse of her sadistic mother, who has already killed her sister. STORY COMMENTS
This story is inspired by true events or a series of true events. It’s a tale of survival and overcoming adversity. The script tells a dark journey of child abuse, rape, torture, and madness.
The plot mainly focuses on the struggle of the young heroine Tammie Jo, the teenage daughter of the sadistic mother. It’s her story of endurance.
The strength of the story lays the main characters of Tammie Jo and Mama. They are characters that definitely feel as if they could attract talent, given their complex personalities and their range of emotion, as well as their inner conflict. …show more content…

The opening nicely sets the tone. In the first act it’s well established that Mama is an abusive and unhinged woman and that her kids are afraid of her. Something terrible in the past occurred regarding one of her other kids.
However, as the story progresses there isn’t a strong inciting event concerning Tammie Jo that moves the story forward into the second act.
The murder of Brice doesn’t involve Tammie Jo. It might be more constructive if her mother forced Tammie Jo to participate in the robbery. The murder could be the event that triggers Tammie Jo to decide she needs to find a way out, especially if her mother threatens her and tells her she could end up like her sister. By the end of the first act, the audience should understand Tammie Jo’s goal and her need to find a way out.
The second act needs to focus more on Tammie Jo and her plan of action. Right now, small attempts are made to make her look more proactive, but they are not as effective as they should be. They are all clustered together (bus, hooker, phone) and don’t create sufficient tension. Begin with one, it fails, add tension to the scene, and later as the story progresses the obstacles and tension should

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