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The Happiness Conspiracy, By John Schumaker

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When writing an essay, it is important to avoid being prejudice against other ideas and concepts that aren't your own, even when you have a point to prove. This can sometimes be the biggest challenge, because it is easy to write about things from our own point of view. For example, John Schumaker wrote an excellent essay that stated many credible sources, but he also made a lot of mistakes that took away from his essay. Overall, Schumaker's "The Happiness Conspiracy" seemed slightly biased due to the fact he spoke mainly about his own beliefs, instead of acknowledging other possible perspectives and eliminating them by stating entrenched facts that supported his argument.

One of the first problems was that the paragraphs were cut off too soon and made into a new paragraph, which created a longer essay that could've been straight to the point and more direct if the paragraphs were stripped of the extra sentences and combined together. Out of the many paragraphs of this essay, not many of them had topic sentences. Without interesting topic sentences, it was definitely a challenge trying to identify and understand the purpose of the paragraph and the information that should have been focused on. For example, the first sentence in paragraph two, “Being positive is mandatory, even with the planet …show more content…

It seemed as if he did not have his own voice, and he mostly quoted other authors he agreed with. The argument was well supported with other authors' ideas, but not backed up with any other credible sources other than the novelists and philosophers. In particular, in paragraph 17 Schumaker brought up Novelist J. D. Salinger's opinion of the happiness conspiracy, but did not feel the need to add his own information to support the novelist and ended the three sentence paragraph with his own opinion saying “the wrong type of happiness is worse than no happiness (Schumaker

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