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The Last Message From Earth

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THE LAST MESSAGE FROM EARTH is a sci-fi thriller that features a compelling plot with a strong moral dilemma. The script merits consider, but there are still areas that would benefit from more development.

First, the goal is clear and the stakes are high. The opening sequence is strong with the disappearance of young Danny. Immediately the audience is emotionally invested in the outcome.

The script does a good job of establishing the goal for the parents. The structure works well. The opening establishes the ordinary life of Amelia and John Hart. It’s clear they are scientists or engineers. There’s a solid inciting event that immediately pulls the audience into the story with the disappearance of Danny.

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Even in a short, there could be an added scene that shows Amelia re-building the machine, as well as showing her physical and emotional struggle with building it. Perhaps a montage could highlight the stages of the progress, as well as showing Amelia sleeping with the Teddy Bear until she completes the machine. One might have her try it and it doesn’t work. This would elevate the struggle and anticipation. Then she figures it out. However, it’s not entirely clear how she would be able to recreate the exact same spot where Danny is.

The teddy bear is a nice plant and symbolic of the parents’ inner conflict. It’s a nice visual reminder of Danny. The use of the teddy bear also provides for a clever payoff when Amelia find finds the thumb drive. However, one small note about the Teddy Bear. It might be more emotionally engaging if the Teddy Bear is given to Danny when he’s born vs. first seeing the teddy bear when he disappears.

What’s not clear is the motivation for Agent Roger to help the parents. Consider showing his struggle with his decision, or maybe he pulls out a picture of his own son. The audience will understand his moral dilemma. They will understand he’s thinking about what he would do if it were his son.

Rogers helps, but reports them missing. One assumes he’s trying to cover his tracks by reporting them gone, but hoping they already escaped. However, it’s not entirely clear. Or perhaps he thought they would escape through the side exits. Try to

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