Thesis Statement

1. The American city was changed drastically in the first half of the 20th century with the beginnings of the industrial revolution and the ongoing flow of foreigners into an already crowded United States.

This semester from being in ENG 101 I have learned to develop better thesis for my essays as well as putting together an essay. The previous semester if I was asked to make a thesis statement I would most likely look crazy and have a poorly written thesis statement. This semester I can say that my project 5 thesis was better to me than any

Personally, from the class of English 1101, I have learned on how to use the writing processes effectively, where the first step is to have a pre-write, which focuses on brainstorming ideas form either the group or from individuals’ brain for the required topic. The second phase of the process is the thesis statement, which is the primary idea of the entire essay. I discovered that the thesis statement should be persuasive and truthful. The third step is on developing drafts, where it showed me on how to focus on content, organization, and style. Again, I noted that I must ask myself who is my audience, and what do they want or need to hear.

Furthermore, I think the strength of my essay was my thesis and supporting ideas of the

Directions: After developing an outline to organize your reasons and evidence, construct your essay below. Don’t forget to explain how your evidence supports your reasoning, and not just explain what the quote means.

I truly can relate to you, last week it was challenging trying to gather all the information without getting caught in any fallacies. I had to change my last two subtopics sentences and then do some serious reading. It was challenging and a learning experience, It works better for me to read as much as I can and then out of that come up with my thesis statement, then come up with the thesis statement and then look for information based on that. I feel that I am alert now when listening to a speech or just watching T.V. when it comes to identify any fallacies present, listening to others help me realize how wrong it sounds to use fallacies and how often they are

Considering that I demonstrated proper usage of quotes, and wrote a decent hook that could grab an audience’s attention. Also, I connected every paragraph, so that the paragraphs could be cohesive and understand by the reader. Not only that, I have finally written a thesis statement that was backed up with the quotes. Although, I did notice that my grammar and punctuation were a bit off, and I forgot to describe the fear that females displayed and how it’s seen today in modern society. Which wasn’t too bad; nonetheless, I felt that I needed to improve these two aspects, if I wished to succeed in English

* If you’re having difficulties writing a thesis, use the thesis generator in the Ashford Writing Center - https://awc.ashford.edu/writing-tools-thesis-generator.html. Remember, a thesis should make a claim – a definitive statement – about some issue. Here is an example: Effective communication is the most important factor in a successful relationship. Without it, chances are, a relationship will fail.

Christina and I spoke on the phone with a man named Renaldo Reser. Mr. Reser has been a member of the non-profit organization, A Better LA, since 2006. Since Los Angeles has a negative reputation when it comes to its youth and gang violence, NFL coach Pete Carroll felt it was his obligation to make a change. Mr. Reser said Carroll established A Better LA to transform “the root from within to give people a reason to hope for a better tomorrow.” The very reason this organization was founded was on the basis for “hope.” Aspirational capital is the main community cultural wealth exerted (Yosso). African-American children have a place to go to hide from violence and gang initiations.

For instance, my thesis statement, displays all parts of a strong thesis; “Brave New World, by Aldous Huxley, reveals that when a society, such as the World State, focuses too much on stability, it derails it's people’s individuality and freedom.” The thesis is clear and concise, it demonstrates a good use of vocabulary, strong verbs, and gives a good idea as to what the essay is going to include. However, the essay also has writing techniques that could be better. Some of these improvements include, the lack of context for a particular quote, as well as an undeveloped argument that was not well supported.

Another error of my writing process was not having a clear and specific thesis statement. I would often combined to many thoughts and ideas all in one sentence, which made it very difficult for readers to understand my main argument. For example, in my fourth essay about performance-enhancing drugs, my thesis “Athletes are constantly recognizable to the public eye; their actions can affect the children and adults for whom they serve as role models, which is why many athletes depend on the use of performance-enhancing drugs to better their performance,” was very vague and was not the main focal point of the essay which it should have been. In recent years prior, I never had any problems trying to convey my message or point. College was entirely a different league. My professor suggested that I read other research papers to better understand how my thesis should sound and be constructed. My professor then told me that I needed to add that explanation into the paragraph so the reader can understand exactly what I am trying to get across with

In the first semester I struggled with writing a simple thesis. I struggled with making sure I have all parts of a thesis in the the thesis. Throughout the second semester I got better at writing the thesis though it wasn’t a high level thesis. On the Diagnostic Check for Huck Finn you comment on my thesis to “make it higher level”. I found couple of practice on thesis online that I did. As I went through the practice I realize that none of my thesis were wrong but they all could be better.

Being a student at California State University East Bay requires all students to pass the University Writing skill Test (WST) requirement. Students have the choice to either take the written exam or to take two writing English courses in order to graduate. Writing is one of my weakness that needs to improve, in order to prepare myself to become a better writer. Now that I have taken English 3000 and currently taking English 3003 I have noticed an improvement in my writing as well as being able to develop a persuasive argument, an improvement in research skills, and being able to catch my readers attention by adjusting the audience. Although, I have not taken the WST exam, taking these two English courses, has helped me develop an understanding of the necessary requirements to no longer have to take the WST because, it has increased my knowledge as a writer.

Water pollution has had devastating effects on the environment, which include irreversible effects to the ocean's ecosystem, health problems and abnormal conditions.

Finding useful and strong evidence is always one of the most difficult, yet one of the most important aspectpart of writing an essay. Evidence is the foundationbase of an essay and all the essay’s content relies on the evidence to support it and make a powerful statement. Most college students are familiar with the concept of finding and using evidence to support their arguments in their essays. It has been something that we have learned in grade school that we have all executed on all of our essays. Evidence is used in order to make all statements and arguments deemed correct. It is always difficult to refute someone when they have strong evidence. With good evidence, the author is able to convince the reader to believe what the author is