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Stan Thinking About His Reunion With Old Friend

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Critiques Stan: Stan’s strength in writing comes from his sense of play and adventure. There is a confidence and consistency in his voice though I think his work would benefit from trusting the reader more. Stan sometimes might spend too much time explaining or fleshing out a particular scene in a way that is redundant while other times, I wanted more setup. For instance, in “On the Things I Should Have Said”, I felt there was a tangle of too many characters and names without a proper introduction of characterization. We come to learn that Kate is setting up Stan with Melissa, the scene unravels a bit haphazardly which would have been fine, but the characterization in this story is a bit lacking as well. Again with Stan’s Yogi story, I felt I needed more of an introduction to his characters, I wanted to know who they are but more importantly why I should care about them. I felt that “Stan Thinking About His Reunion With Old Friends” was the strongest of Stan’s stories, though the title might be a bit misleading as this story features Hank and Steven, not Stan. The story begins and we learn that Hank is meeting his friend Steven after some time apart. We immediately feel that something might be at stake. The dialogue in this story is strong and Stan uses foreshadowing to build momentum in the story. Shannon: Many of the stories Shannon shared with the class were excerpts from a larger Memoir Shannon is compiling. Two of the major events Shannon’s memoir will focus

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