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Hey Trouble Analysis

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Thank you for sharing the next installment of “Hey Trouble” with me. The chapters continued to be easy reading with nice pacing. The humor is definitely not wearing off in these chapters as Lexi’s insights and the community around her is a gold mine. A couple of lines I enjoyed in these chapters were, “I keep waking up expecting to be sealed again to the air mattress, leaking teaspoons of deep end onto Grandma’s faded rainbow striped sheets. (1)” and “The boy is in a deep squat of mourning over his lunch. (3)” Also, I enjoyed both the pool scene, and especially, the egg scene at the end of chapter 8. I laughed out loud at the unraveling of the action, “‘Not nice!’ he yells into the dusk. Then one by one he starts beaming eggs into Dana’s yard. A few whistle into the air before I hear Dana squawk in disbelief. (8)” Also, Joaquin’s introduction into the story and his place within his family dynamics was …show more content…

From the four years he’s been with the family, he’s definitely picked up a lot from them. I thought the line, “It’s about housewives. Chase called one of them the N word. (6)”, it’s very telling in that Joaquin seems to fit in so well with his siblings that they don’t notice his skin color off the bat, or make an issue of it to him. The end of chapter 8 with Dana’s stepdad walking across the yard and the part, “the heel of his boot entangling with one of Grandma’s metal bunny garden stakes before he shakes free and kicks it clear.” It was a great suspenseful ending that illustrating the potential skirmish between neighbors.
Here are some suggestions for the next draft and ensuing chapters. There are some points in the chapters that could be clearer. For example, Joaquin’s ‘Gotcha Day’ could be mentioned as an anniversary to detail that it wasn’t Joaquin’s first one as he’s been in the states for a while. I keep trying to buy Lexi’s passiveness towards Dana, but I just can’t feel it from my reading yet. It also may be that I am projecting how I

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