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Fahrenheit 451 Language Analysis

Decent Essays

One final strength in my essays this year were the structures of my sentences. The sentences I wrote often included a noun, verb, punctuation marks and they contained a complete thought. In Journal Set 1, I say, “There are some significant conflicts one must overcome in order to climb Mount Everest, but one of the hardest ones to deal with is the altitude.” (Identity Journal Set 1 1). Include in that sentence are all the requirements for a sentence. There’s a verb, overcome, multiple nouns such as conflicts and Mount Everest and the is also a period to complete the sentence. Also there was a thought explaining that in order to climb Mount Everest, there are challenges that the climber must overcome. Weaknesses Throughout the year I had …show more content…

Crud is used to try to add more detail, however, it only makes reading essays more difficult. Sadly, I fell into the trap of adding crud several times this year. In my Fahrenheit 451 Timed Writing I wrote, “Today, there are no laws that enforce censorship and books are encouraged to help us learn and to entertain” (F451 Timed Writing 1). Instead of writing “there are no laws that enforce censorship”, I could have written “no laws enforce censorship”. This takes away the “there are” part of the sentence and even makes the sentence make more sense than it did …show more content…

This year I was able to use internal citations from books but I hardly used dialogue. I think that using some dialogue in my essays would add an extra texture to my essays that would help bring them to the next level. In my Memoir Essay, the only dialogue I used was “‘Goodbye Mom and Dad’” (Memoir Essay 2). The memoir was supposed to have lots of dialogue, however, I hardly used that element in my essay. If I can improve on my incorporation of dialogue in future year, it will help the quality and depth of my

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