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Gun Control Research Paper

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I believe you’re using APA and you did a good job of doing that, but you need to put your title on your first official page (the page you actually start your essay). I also think you should come up with a better title than just gun control, I mean what about gun control, your title doesn’t give me any insight on what you actually will be talking about dealing with guns. Going through it I can sense what you are trying to convey but the title is a little bland. Also, you cannot have your reference page on the same page as some of your essay, so the last page needs to JUST be your reference page. Speaking of references, I’m sorry to tell you, but you have no academic sources in your essay, no primary source either. You just have popular sources. My advice is go on websites …show more content…

Your primary source needs to be something that was first handedly done. So you either have to find a website that directly did a survey or interview on someone that was in a gun violence act or you have to do one yourself. Another thing is with your in-text citations, you need to use a comma in between each thing so it should be like: (Muhammad, 2017). When you use an in-text citation it needs to be after the quote, you say something like “Muhammad stated ‘blah blah blah’ (2017). Those statistics on pages 4-5, you should use those in sentences with your own words. That’s a lot of points that are just hanging there. You must take out all those you’s, I’s, and we’s. You probably can get an F but just having all of those. She made an announcement saying not to use any pronoun. I would also take out whatever words you bolded. You have to take out any citation that you got from Wikipedia, that’s a big no-no. When you use sentences like “Gun violence is a serious issue and many people are affected by it” tell us why gun violence is a serious

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