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Sommers Response Paper

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1. Sommers’ article follows the CARS model very well, which in return makes the introduction very effective. First, Sommers “establishes a territory” when she introduces the two linear writing processes. The first processes being Gordon Rohman’s and the second being James Britton’s model. She grants right off the bat that research on writing strategies is lacking to say the least. This statement allows Sommers to create a niche that she will further explain throughout the paper based on her own research. She informs the reader with generalizations about writing strategies and revisions. This allows the reader to be informed about what the paper will be discussing in detail, as well as, keep the reader on track to understand the article to the …show more content…

Sommers explains to the reader the mindset of revision in the eyes of college freshman vs. experienced writers. Based on her research she was able to establish that the term “revision” has two drastic meanings when it comes to experienced vs. inexperienced writers. The college freshmen referred to revision as simply rewording the preexisting writing in their first draft. Sommers explains that the “scale of concern” for the college students was “deletion, substitution, addition, and rewording.” (380) In contrast, the experienced writers had a very different mindset when it came to their revision process. They explained when revising they focused on finding “shape” and “form” to their writing. To further explain, they do not have simply one rough daft that becomes a final draft, but rather they have numerous drafts that they continuously dig through to develop “structural patterns.” (384) In comparison to the college freshmen their revision process isn’t just rewording, it’s continuously reframing each draft. Through this research Sommers explains to the reader the way revisions should be, and the areas that people lack with misconceptions that the word “revising” simply means rewording but in Sommers’ opinion it’s a total revamping

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