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Sue Ellen Satire

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The concept of this comedy-romance script is smart. It’s a high-concept premise that easily engages the audience. The first thirty pages offer a likeable protagonist in the character of Sue Ellen. Her goal is clear and the stakes feel personal. The audience easily engages to the plotline and one effortlessly roots for Sue Ellen. It’s the type of concept that feels marketable.
The tone is consistently light-hearted. Good visual and physical comedy is used, as well as some fun dialogue. There are solid themes about grieving, healing, learning to survive on one’s own, and respect.
The opening of the script does a nice job establishing the ordinary world of Sue Ellen as a hard working mother. The idea of career day is a nice reveal that conveys …show more content…

It’s a bit creepy. Make sure there’s a payoff later.
It does feel or seem a bit awkward that Sue Ellen would want to have another child given her children are grown. Make sure to explore Sue Ellen’s inner conflict i.e. that she feels defined as a mother (nicely foreshadowed with “I’m a mom!”)
Show that she struggles with her own kids growing up and possibly moving out. Having another baby probably feels that void, or subconsciously she knows that she’s losing her husband and thinks this is the way to fix it. This doesn’t need to come out in the first act, but later during her character arc it should.
Also, perhaps connect the idea of Restin Cosmetics to her inner struggle to be young again or to her self-image.
The scene in which Bill breaks up with Sue Ellen might be reworked. Consider another way for Sue Ellen to find out about Diane. For example, maybe she decides to surprise Bill at his office. She can still be wrapped in saran wrap. Maybe she walks in on them. It much better to show the affair than to have Bill verbally tell her. Given that a visual of Diane is setup with the video, it makes for a nice payoff to catch Bill with Diane, especially if Sue Ellen is in the saran-wrap. This can generate nice

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