You did a great job of employing various poetic techniques throughout each of your poems. There are some things I would recommend you take a second look at, but overall I thought each of your pieces was pretty effective. I’m so happy you decided to include “Sugar” in this set of poems. I really liked it when you read it aloud in class, and was pleased to have another chance to experience it. I think the strongest aspect of this piece is your use of onomatopoeia and word choice to create a rhythm and rhyme that truly embodies the monotony you describe. Also, the combination of repetition and variation in the first two stanzas captures how you describe two very different ways of experiencing one thing, sugar. One aspect of your poem which might …show more content…
I was unsure of its purpose at some points. However, when you wrote “Potent Night Dream Ghost” I thought the capitalization truly enhanced the line. It gave importance to what you were talking about, making it seem like more than an abstract concept, like a concrete, terrifying problem you come face to face with. Still, I think the message of fear for these abstract concepts in general could be presented more clearly if you included more concrete images in the poem. In discussing “October”, it is impossible not to bring up the phrase “bare and bleak,/ Broken…” I found these three strong, meaningful words to be packed with a lot of emotion. They are essential to the desolate tone and thus very important for such a short piece. Finally, “Chicago” was packed with sound imagery, which was a refreshing change of pace from many other poems I’ve read. Not only did you provide concrete details that made the poem memorable and relatable, but you did it in a less conventional way than simple visual imagery. A criticism I must offer is that the conflicting images of “Your fingers resting in mine” and “Hands inches from mine” were a bit confusing when I first read the poem. Upon further examination I realized that the poem must be taking place over time and not just in a single moment. Nevertheless, if other people also had a problem with the clarity of these lines, it might be worth it to change them so that they do not
Diction is seen to be used greatly in conveying the suitability of the town for All Souls' Day. Pathetic Fallacy is also used to portray the message by Albert Camus. Also, the “cool wind”, “big clouds...trailing shadows”, “glossy” and “oiled clothing” give the impression of a cool, damp shadowy day, with clothing mimicking this, portraying the psychology of the people of Oran when they are in melancholy for their loved ones. However, from around the third paragraph onwards, a turning point is seen. As previously suggested, it was a suitable time of the year for mourning and All Souls' Day, but ironically this did not occur.
- I really liked how you analyzed the two poems, and their tone towards steam-engine trains. Here is something that you said that caught my attention:
As we read through, the reader can begin to see a change in the tones of the poems. In A November Landscape, the tone is very dark and sad until it hits the third stanza. The speaker talks very sad then, the author adds the word “yet” to show the reader it is not all what it seems. He then finishes the last stanza by saying “April lured the crocus through snow” which shows signs of spring. The tone in Winter brightens up and talks about how “spring must take its place” but then is quickly switch around and the speaker says “I tell you no” and ends the poem with absolutely no hope and says “who watch each other with the winter’s look, touch with his hand, speak with his bitter breath”.
Throughout the passage, the author uses symbolism to create a more meaningful and emotional plot. The frame-story is set during a cold spell in November, which signifies a
I really enjoyed your poems, I liked the first one how calming and thoughtful it was. The other three were great on their takes of love and loss. The poem “106” was about a person feeling cold about breaking up with someone even though they are walking through a really hot day. “Vulture” seemed to be a poem about anger towards a person that seemed to be significant part of their life but are no longer there, along with dealing with their memories of that person as well. I want to say “Pure” is about someone lamenting the loss of another person even though they had difficulties with one another the narrator feels as if they were truly meant to be.
The author uses mood to really get the message out there, so people can feel what the victims felt everyday. "I am not an artist But my mind has painted a painting of you " this element contributes to the poem because it makes the author feel like he wasn’t enough to be able to do anything to help those people that suffered everyday. He had a view that by telling everyone about the horrible pain that they went through people would remember that and that way they can honor those people. I would recommend this poem to everyone that wants to know what they had to go through and why they never said
The poem I chose to analyze was “Sestina” by Elizabeth Bishop. I chose this poem due to its structure, use of figurative language, repetition and tone. This poem uses vivid imagery to draw the reader in as though they are present at the grandmother’s house on that rainy September afternoon as the grandmother makes tea and the grandchild draws innocently. The poem takes a turn when the reader realizes that the grandmother is crying as though she has lost someone special in her life. The child drawings reflect those emotions as we analyze what her drawings are actually trying to convey.
As a group, we picked poems that cover different aspects about which students in elementary school or even in junior high might be dealing with on a daily basis, affecting their lives emotionally, mentally, as well as physically. We open up with a poem that is about each of us being born “in different ways.” People are all born different sizes, shapes, and colors. We each have a few poems that we feel fit both our differences as well as fit the majority of what students in elementary and junior high go through. The poem Freckle Face is about a girl with freckles and her many ways of trying to remove them in order to look like the rest of the girls. Four Eyes is about a child who feels his style is being destroyed and he is becoming a nerd due to the fact that he now has to wear
I loved this essay. It was beautifully written, and the voice and reading of it was equally as majestic. Each time I finished, I felt fuller, enriched.
Thanks for sharing the start of your untitled project with me. The initial chapters were beautiful in aesthetics, yet at times weird and unsettling, and insightful into the dynamic of the main character(s) of the story and the people around them. There were many great lines that exuded the environment being created. Some of the many lines I enjoyed were, “It always reminded them of something a whaler would find—a great big ribcage of a beast so much bigger than themselves. (3)”, “They broke down in this way, quite softly at first, with the bat of an eye of a lick of the lips, and then louder, with stifled hiccups and full bellied inhales. (3)”, “They seemed frail, like birds’ bones, and her skin had shimmered like pewter. (8)” and “dusted
The first element which I like the most was the title of your poem “If You See It What Is It You See”. I truly love the title since I understand that there is more to everything than simply what it looks like. In another word, we must always look for a deeper meaning to everything to find the actual meaning of things. The second element which
In this essay I’ll take each poem and in a sentence or two explain the
My third poem is called Poem III in the Untitled Series by Samantha. This poem is an elegy. I chose to do A,A,BB, CC, DD, EE, and so on as a rhyme. I wanted to take something serious and try to not make it serious. It is kind of an advice poem about college and drinking. I never wrote a poem that rhymes before until this one. I found it rather
Second poem I would like to comment on is Maya Angelou’s “Still I Rise.” I liked this poem because it is how I try to live life ignoring discrimination and prejudice and going on to live my life and better myself and rise above all the obstacles the worlds throws at you I may be white but I used to be fat which is still one of society’s still accepted prejudices, so I dealt with a lot of hate over the years. It was a very empowering poem. I like how subtle yet powerful the poem is written it draws you in and makes you smile and think. This poem influenced me and gave me the idea to write a poem about not fighting against all adversity, but accepting it and rising above it.