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Carlos Salazar Pursuit Of Happiness

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Carlos Salazar begins “Pursuit of Happiness” by creating an idea of the different kinds of happiness that exist. Salazar states in his thesis that, “Happiness is temporarily most of the time but love is the only happiness that can last the longest” (1). Salazar has a roadmap included in his thesis but throughout his essay he tends to steer off his roadmap. Salazar’s main points consist of the temporary happiness that drugs, sleep, sex, and love contain. Although Salazar includes a roadmap in his thesis and also clearly connects his topic to Drop City, Salazar needs to stay on his roadmap, come up with a counter argument, and organize his body paragraphs. Including a roadmap in a thesis is great but what is even more great is an essay that is composed by following the roadmap that is set in a thesis. Salazar’s claim is that love is a happiness that lasts the longest in comparison to any other kind of happiness. Even though he does include reasoning of his claim in his paragraphs, in some sections of his writing, Salazar seems to actually make the claim that in some cases a person’s interpretation of happiness is not actually happiness. “They all make people happy but is it worth being happy for the things that they do or are they just wasting time trying to be happy” (Salazar 5). …show more content…

I think Salazar should focus on just one topic per paragraph. For example, in Paragraph two, Salazar begins by explaining how sleep is a happiness that actually does not benefit a person if they are sleeping to much (2) and then he quickly changes his topic to drugs being beneficial only temporarily (2). Instead of suddenly changing topics, Salazar can create separate paragraphs for each different topic. By creating more paragraphs for each topic instead of combining multiple topics into one paragraph Salazar will help his readers understand his writing in a more facile

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