Constructive Criticism In College

I begin to consider an essay I wrote earlier about my abs. Then a photo of my family, and then an essay I tried to write on quitting tennis yet never really spent enough energy for fear that I would get emotional. I consider an essay for today that is revealing of personal essays simultaneously revealing about me. Every time I got a paper back, it had a small part of each essay that was circled, indicating that the real topic of my paper was not elaborated enough on. What was wrong with my writing?

Once I figured out what we were actually doing, I enjoyed re-learning a style of writing that I had done only once before. The most difficult part of the Anthem assignment was understanding the new style and learning what a new teacher expected out of each essay project. After lots of peer editing and review that I really enjoyed and found helpful, that essay is finished and completely in the past. The argument paper, even though it is turned in, isn’t really finished because I choose to argue for less standardized testing schools which is a topic that is always changing and developing. I do not think I will add any more to the paper, but I have found myself perking up whenever that topic is mentioned, and continuing to learn more about it just because I have a foundation of it now because of my research for my argument. For me, the most difficult part of an argument paper is always finding successful counterarguments that I can fairly and soundly refute. I usually collect all the information and process it together before coming to a decision, with this paper I had to make a decision and then collect

This happens more often than I would like. My future papers after this one have greatly improved over time. For instance, my second paragraph’s last sentence says, “Blackbird” was to represent a typical African American woman facing oppression in this era. The following paragraph starts of with, “Lyrics that furthered the idea that “Blackbird” was about the discrimination and hardships these women faced during this time. My last sentence and my first sentence of my paragraph do not transition beautifully. When revising this problem I kept the last sentence of the second paragraph and I changed the first sentence of the third paragraph. For example, “ Blackbird” was to represent a typical African American woman facing oppression in this era. Lyrics furthered the idea that the song was about the African American women facing oppression. This change was necessary for my essay to make my essay transition better from one idea to another. Fixing this creates unity in my

Writing an essay may seem like a huge obstacle to overcome, but with a plan of attack and a little organization, it can be easily completed. All it takes is seven easy steps.

I see that writing an essay is like telling your audience a story that you have created yourself. The story could either be about me struggling in being accepted in Valdosta State University, or how Immokalee High school, which is the high school I had attended, began as an educational institution. The paper I typed up in high school were mostly looking up information about a historical event. For example, how Christopher Columbus had discovered America and how he was a terrible person in general. Outside the textbook and writing class, I had written multiple stories about my life and my feelings towards people. These types of stories I had written were very personal. When creating them, I started pouring my emotions into an electronic device.

There are many components involved in the writing process that are important to incorporate in your essay to make it a strong well constructed piece. Knowledge about the writing process is needed in order to succeed. Without the proper the knowledge there will be no direction throughout the paper. There are many different ways to write, but it is necessary to include in depth research, a strong thesis that pulls your audience into the paper, and organizational skills to create a backbone for a strong complete essay.

Writing essays have never been easy for me. Describing my thoughts and feelings just don't seem to turn into the right words I want to say. Coming up with a theme and an argument is hard to convey, making the reader see what I'm truly trying to say. The hardest parts of writing essays for me is coming up with the right things to say that correlate to my argument and doing so under a short period of time.

Another error of my writing process was not having a clear and specific thesis statement. I would often combined to many thoughts and ideas all in one sentence, which made it very difficult for readers to understand my main argument. For example, in my fourth essay about performance-enhancing drugs, my thesis “Athletes are constantly recognizable to the public eye; their actions can affect the children and adults for whom they serve as role models, which is why many athletes depend on the use of performance-enhancing drugs to better their performance,” was very vague and was not the main focal point of the essay which it should have been. In recent years prior, I never had any problems trying to convey my message or point. College was entirely a different league. My professor suggested that I read other research papers to better understand how my thesis should sound and be constructed. My professor then told me that I needed to add that explanation into the paragraph so the reader can understand exactly what I am trying to get across with

An average essay has either a flawed thesis or weak evidence, often combined with an unclear or jarring writing style.

Writing an essay can be a frustrating, exasperating process, but it doesn't have to be. If you know the steps and methods, the rest should be an easy task. Find a subject you care about, and which you think others will enjoy reading it. Find the most seductive language and style that will captivate the readers, and go on.

As a writer there are many elements of writing that I struggle with, especially when composing an essay. When writing an essay, there are usually many skills that need to be used in order to be successful with the writing assignment. Many times in writing I struggle with explaining and fully developing the supporting details and ideas in my essay. I would also like to improve on incorporating clear topic sentences and concluding sentences, connecting my paragraphs ideas back to my thesis. Lastly, improvement can be made in my writing by avoiding awkward or wordy sentences. Writers face numerous challenges in their writing but strive to overcome or improve these challenges with each piece they write.

I recently began working at a new job as a medical assistant in a cardiology office. With my background in cardiology being limited to that which I learned in my undergraduate courses I am constantly learning new information and skills. Consequently, I am occasionally corrected in the tasks I perform. The most recent piece of constructive criticism I received at this clinic was regarding proper placement of EKG leads. My original placements of the leads were not entirely incorrect, yet the MA whom I was shadowing adjusted them within one centimeter. I was not insulted by this correction, but rather intrigued as to her reasoning for the adjustment. Of course, precision of EKG lead placement on patients in a cardiovascular clinic is crucial,

That is where most of my mistakes are is in the body paragraphs. That is usual where I get off topic or start to ramble on about one thing which leads to one paragraph is longer than the others. My conclusions never connect the entire essay together which I also say needs improvement.

A major area for development and improvement revolves around effective note taking and essay planning/writing. As a Higher Education student you will be required to plan and produce countless essays in relation to the course you are studying, and a key point of reference to help with this would come from “The Guide to Learning and Study Skills for Higher Education and at Work” who give the following advice and tips: ‘Identify the purpose of the essay and who the audience (reader) is and what is required for both – structure your work and develop your arguments/main points – proof read your work and improve language, spelling, punctuation, grammar and style – review what you did and use feedback to improve your essay writing for the future’ (Bingham, R. and Drew, S. 2012 The guide to learning and study skills: For higher Education and at work).

I find that criticism fuels my inspiration the strongest. Whenever I am rejected or negatively commented, I feel an adrenaline to prove my self worth. I use criticism as a way to turn mistakes around using a stronger mindset.