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Response To Rachel Thesis

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While reading Rachel essay, what I really enjoy from her paper was the way she wove in her quotes. The way she wove in her quotes through her sentences gave her to more structure as well strong evidence to back up her claim agreeing with the sources for her research. I would like to use that method into my writing because not only does it help your structure and seem easier to read when reading the argument, it flows with her writing, that is something I would like to implement into my essay. Rachel thesis was stated very clearly in her introduction which make it easier to understand reading through out here paper on her claims and why she felt New Mexico state University needed to make some changes with the student’s requirements. On the …show more content…

Kolb and part of the what it discusses is how people define their learning space based on experiences(199)” this part confused me was there was no quotation marks so I had no idea if their Rachel words or the authors, as I continued to read it end with (199) which means it was a quote but I had no idea where it was starting from and where the research was coming from as well, since there was only numbers and not an author’s name. I think just going back and clearly that confusing that make the introduction have more structure and be a strong intro because the rest of the introduction was good in detail. I think the points in Rachel documented argument is being clear, the only trouble I had throughout the essay was she put little reminder like the end of her introduction “I decided not to ask for a full program, because there would be many more factors.” This sentence weakens her argument, because Rachel was a full program and

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