Improvements to Ideas and Impressions After reading through my midterm I realized that a lot of the points I made in my connection to the text paragraph weren’t backed up with enough supporting evidence. This made the paragraph feel mostly unconfident and unclear. I was trying to convey the idea that being isolated from society isn’t necessarily a bad thing and that the girl sitting on top of the television set had a wider scope of possibilities available to her when she was without the TV than when she was with it. The way that I went about addressing this was far from being the most eloquent way of doing so. In one statement I said, “ (...) she has found herself isolated and though she’s trying to reconnect herself by trying the dials …show more content…
Jokes aside, those are some very real problems I have in my writing and over the course of three pages I have comma splices mentioned 6 times. For example in the sentence, “Isolation is so often compared with negative emotions that we have come to acknowledge it as negative, however sometimes by choosing to isolate yourself from the world, you can find a personal liberation that is far from being negative,” I could have easily broken it up into two sentences and made it the whole idea more readable by taking out some commas. Most of the time when I’m writing, I feel like I have more to say than can be confined in a single paragraph. Using commas gives the illusion that I’m are saying more because the idea keeps going but in reality, I could (and should) be less afraid of using periods. Something about the finality of a period at the end of a sentence makes me afraid to use it until I am confident that I’ve fully expressed my idea. This is a problem that can be easily fixed with a greater confidence of where to properly place punctuation. I’m sure that over time and with practice I’ll be able to use commas more efficiently.
Another thing that I received comments on was my incorrect switching of points of view in my personal response. In a few sentences I’m writing in first person and then somehow either in the same sentence or the
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Because of this, I make mistakes structuring it correctly or even punctually. In high school, I took a college English class that would allow me to advance in my writing skills. However, the class only focused on using transition words, and nothing else. In this English 1001 class, I have learned to write my paper with fewer structure mistakes. However, I was never good at writing my paper that was punctually correct. In the past, I was told to never use the word I in any writing assignments. This often confused me when I was writing the research paper. Sometimes, I would not punctuate my sentences correctly after the signal phrase. In the essay, I wrote, “At one point, a professor said…”and I forgot the comma after the signal phrase very, said. Slowly, I was able to use this format and express my opinion on the research. Unfortunately, I still make those mistakes unintentionally and it often hurts my grade. In the first essay, I did well on expressing my ideas, but structurally, I did not do so well. By rewriting the essay, I hope to earn a better
Everyone know very well about this statement, “First Impression is the Last Impression” but the meaning is that, When one Person takes maximum 3-5 seconds research to form judgement or visual perception about other person. Everyone forms judgement in a flash, from the person sitting next to us at Functions, in a park, at dinners or parties anywhere. It is a Human nature and no one cannot refuse it.
In the introduction to my first essay the 3rd sentence contains an easily remediable comma splice: “Not me, I live for this.” Later in the same paragraph I made the same mistake with “My operators think they are the ones who drive me into these situations – they’re wrong, I am the one who drags them into the belly of the beast.” Prior to ENC1101, I would never consider the preceding sentence wrong. After learning about the proper usage of commas and semicolons, I realized I have been creating comma splices all my life. Learning what independent clauses were and how to properly punctuate them has given my writing a greater sense of credibility. Replacing the comma with a semicolon, the punctuation used to separate 2 independent clauses, fixes them. Another error exposed during this course was my improper use of word forms. An example is shown here from my second essay “Seeing their demeanor switch from animosity to appreciative made me feel rewarded for my efforts”. Reading that sentence in my mine seems fine, but on closer inspection the words “animosity” and “appreciative” are not in same form. This course (specifically the SmartThinking program) has shown me that making word forms agree leads to more fluid writing. Correcting these errors leads to more mature writing and will make future professors respect my writing
The writing handbook I use is The Little Seagull Handbook. The specific area I see myself making the most mistakes with punctuation is comma splices. Sometimes I place commas in sentences where I think they are supposed to be, but really they are not. I think punctuation is probably the most common mistake I make when writing a paper. I changed my second goal to providing more details and examples in my writing. I thought I expanded pretty well on important specifics in my papers, but I noticed there are still some parts where I do not provide sufficient detailed information. An example of this would be not providing enough details on my goals I make; I am striving to meet this goal by the end of the course. The way I see myself determining
When I stop to think about the memory’s that I have made during my first semester of college; there are both good and bad pieces or times that present themselves. Often with many things there are gray areas, and writing would fall in there for me. I fortunately understand now that I have times where I can over look many of my writing flaws. Such as sentence structure! This by far was my biggest problem in this class, and I fully understand why. Personally I have times that will type up a paragraph and never notice the mistake. That is until someone points it out to me. It’s almost like my brain knows that something is wrong with it, but for some unknown reason it won’t register when I’m revising my paper. So as a writer I have realized that I need to take advantage of people around me and get their feedback on my essay’s; because
I had been rereading my Writing Project 1 essay over Philando Castile for other a week to make sure it was to perfection. It wasn’t until my paper went through peer review that I realized my mistakes. For example, one of my first sentences in my essay made absolutely no sense because it was missing one word, but when I had been reading it myself, I had never even noticed that it was missing the word. The sentence had said, “Castile, with his girlfriend, Diamond Reynolds, and her four-year-old daughter in the car, was over for a broken brake light” (Straley 1). I had been reading the sentence as if the word,
The two errors that present the biggest challenge to me in writing are comma splice and unnecessary commas. All throughout high school and into college these two errors have been my biggest downfall. In Fall 2014 semester, I took English 111 and my teacher had written on every paper that I wrote that I have to be careful of both comma splice and unnecessary commas. I can use this class as an opportunity to correct these errors by referring back to this book. In my other class, we didn’t use a book so I never had something to help me understand what exactly I was doing wrong. I hope that with help from my classmates and my teacher I can overcome this obstacle I face in my writing. In addition, I plan to use the book to help me when I am uncertain
Impression evidence can be defined as objects or materials that have retained the characteristics of other objects through direct contact.
There are a variety of elements to consider when entering any of these three environments, both at the macro level of the European Union (EU) and the meso level of the individual national context. An MNC penetrating the EU is required to take the common legislation across the countries into account while also still adapting the norms and laws of the individual national contexts in the EU.
Perception is defined as how you look at others and the world around you. Being able to select, organize and intercept information starts the perceptual process. Perception affects the way people communicate with others. An individual’s pattern of thinking can affect their perception of others. Most people communicate best with people of similar cultures.
There are four different sources of knowledge: perception, introspection, reason and memory. All our knowledge roots from our perception. Perception is the way humans sense the world outside the body. We perceive through our five senses: see, hear, smell, taste, and touch. Humans gain knowledge through experiences and experience through perception. Usually we can trust our senses to perceive our surroundings effectively but there are times we misperceive. Illusions, hallucinations or impediments of the accurate flow of information to our senses are examples of misperceptions. For example if someone hits their head causing their vision to blur or impedes them from effectively processing what occurring around them, then they shouldn’t trust their senses. Another example would be an anxiety attack causing a signal of threat to the brain also preventing the person from correctly processing their surroundings. If nothing can prove we are misperceiving then we have good reason to be believe our senses.
Throughout the passage of time, philosophers have written and discussed many topics in philosophy. Sometimes, these philosophers agree on ideas or sometimes they make their own assumptions. There are two philosophers who had different ideas concerning where innate ideas come from and how we get these types of ideas. Rene Descartes and John Locke were these two philosophers with the opposing argument on innate ideas. The place where Descartes discusses his views were in the Meditations on First Philosophy and Locke's argument is located in An Essay Concerning Human Understanding. By using these sources I will be able to describe the difference between these two arguments on innate ideas.
First impressions are always used in setting the tone when you first meet someone. Without the luxury of knowing the persons background, you initially judge someone by the way that person introduces themselves and how they come across to you. By coming across, I mean the way a person carries themselves. For example, if the person comes across as shy and introverted, you tend to think of that person as timid and somewhat weak. However, if that same person comes across as outgoing, confident (but not to confident) and easy to talk to, you look at that person as someone you can count on and possibly a leader. This type of evaluation (even though we all do it) is for the most part not always the right way to evaluate a person.
As Shirley Manson, singer/songwriter, once said, “I was a redhead and a middle child; both can make you feel excluded. It's like fighting to be included, in the swim of things. After a while you start to develop a bit of a victim mentality, which isn't great for a happy life.” Despite being an only child, this book taught me something about what it feels like to be a middle child, and all of the responsibilities they are forced to take on. First Impressions is a short, good book that teaches a valuable life lesson that holds true even for today’s teenager: Living with siblings isn’t always easy, and not everyone always gets a ‘happily ever after’.