Peer Revision Process Analysis

Modern Lacrosse made a huge comeback, with millions of fans and over 70 years the sport has been played and loved. It will continually be well-loved and grow in diversity being played in the national games and pro level. What’s there to hate on, a sport that brings people together as family through thick and thin. Making each other better by pushing your teammates to their max. Showing your teammates your drive to push yourself and make a comeback, also having a strong mentality is key in this sport striving for greatness.

My writing process, no matter what, always includes brainstorming, rough drafts and proofreading. When I receive an assignment I read the question over what feels like a million times till I fully understand what it is asking. I will make notes on the handout and as soon as ideas come to my mind i will jot them down, even if I do not end up using them. As soon as I get ideas i role with it, even if I have to go back in the end and change everything. Rough drafts come next. I like to write them out first so i can scribble and make notes to myself and fill things in when i need to. I write in pen so sometimes by drafts can be more rough then they should be, but that is how i like it. After my essay is all finished I proofread, many many times.

The closing statements in the previous paragraph lead to the next senior reason for marijuana’s regulation: the marijuana-related crime. Marijuana’s share in the percentage of total drug arrests in California hit a high in 2010, reaching 52.1 percent. While it has ever-so-slightly fallen in the years following, it is still a substantial statistic; more than half of all drug arrests. Legalizing marijuana

In the essay “Marijuana Should Not Be Legalized,” there are four supporting arguments stated of opponents on legalizing marijuana. For instance, opponents argue “scientific reports show harmful effects of habitual marijuana use” (2). In addition, prominent politicians in Massachusetts contend “legalization provides a veneer of acceptance that will encourage children and teens to try it” (3). Furthermore, “legalization will give the cannabis industry the same incentive the alcohol industry has to encourage excessive use and lobby against tax and regulation” is argued by opponents (6). Lastly, the essay counters “legalization has already had negative consequences on

Undoubtedly, O. Hayden Griffin III (2013) argues “[…] the Supreme Court has had a profound effect on drug policy through the institution’s interpretation of federal drug legislation, which ostensibly will continue into the future” (O. Hayden Griffin III, 2013, p.677). O. Hayden Griffin III (2013) demonstrates that the drug policy in the United States is based on the Supreme Court’s interpretation of current drug legislation. Additionally, O. Hayden Griffin III (2013) made an argument regarding marijuana stating “despite the decision of the Office of the Attorney General, federal legislation regarding marijuana has not been altered and […] change in presidential administration could result in a change in policy” (O. Hayden Griffin III, 2013, p.676). Furthermore, O. Hayden Griffin III (2013) demonstrates that in the future the possibly of having marijuana policies be altered by the next presidential administration.

Citizens who are for the reform of marijuana or any drug have obvious opposite feelings towards the previous statements. First of all citizens for drug reform state that although marijuana causes adverse health effects so do many other activities that are perfectly legal. Should the government outlaw alcohol, tobacco, and having unprotected and promiscuous sex (Rachels 224)? Also, the claim that drugs cause harm to family and friends can be rebutted with the fact that people are harmful to family and friends without the influence of drugs (Rachels 228-229). Alcohol is a completely legal drug and many people are killed in car accidents involving drunk drivers, yet alcohol is still not outlawed. In no way am I condoning driving under the influence, but it is a thought provoking argument. A great argument made by supporters of drug reform is a question posed by Michael Huemer. He says “is it unjust for the state to punish people without having a good reason for doing so?” (Rachels 229). With valid

I also have a process when I peer review papers. I make sure to always compliment the student’s paper and then I point out some areas where there may need some improvement. I always make sure to provide an example so they know what I am trying to say.

Being on a lacrosse team is like joining a family where everyone is welcoming of new people. Teammates will push each other to become better players, teammates, and people in life. Players will push each other to do better because they get to know one another and only want the best for one other. Lacrosse players treat one another like siblings and will always be there for to support each other. Even when playing other teams players will seem to get along after the games. Within the sport players and fans will treat one another with respect and try and enjoy the game. Everyone on a team is striving to make one another better in just about every aspect of life. I personally have seen this throughout my lifetime while I was evolved with

The first thing I learned from being on a team was responsibility. Volleyball stressed this concept heavily because members relied on each other to be at practice and games so that we can grow and bond together to form a stronger team. With this responsibility came learning how to effectively communicate. Communication was essential especially in a coach to athlete situation, much like a boss to employee scenario, because if we could not attend practice or we were injured, the coach (boss) had to know. I strive to be an effective communicator at my current job and future career in graphic design so that my customers can get the best experience possible. With my ever-improving skills in communication, holding responsibility for myself and this Bay scholarship, I will be able to reach my goal of living a successful life as a graphic

The points made in this article serve greater purpose in writing a paper pertaining to the history and path of the legalization of marijuana rather than the overall topic marijuana legalization, so I would not use this in my paper due to it taking the subject to another path. Although this article provides useful topics for a paper over marijuana legalization it just does not have enough detail over why and how marijuana could be

There are two legal issues related to this news article. Should the federal government simply decriminalize marijuana and does the current criminalization of marijuana hold any basis in ensuring public

The biggest struggle for our group as a whole was in communication with one another, whose lacking led to a falling out with our team. As members in the team began to argue and disagree more, the team’s abilities began to crumble. I would often try to either resolve it or stay out of the issues in hopes that they would resolve; they never truly did. This is an example of my final lesson in learning that our decisions do make a difference. Specifically, this affects me in a personal way as the way I act or treat other’s could strongly influence their actions each day. It is important that we keep in mind the fact that our words and actions have the potential of either making or destroying someone’s day, whose consequences could be

The following is a proposal for a public policy that would legalize marijuana and have the drug be treated as alcohol. This is necessary because the current policy is detrimental to society and the legalization of marijuana would be beneficial. The prohibition of the drug is unfounded because tobacco and alcohol, legalized substances, are more dangerous than marijuana. Also, the legislation regarding the drug was created on racist sentiments, reducing the law’s credibility. The current policy also creates a dangerous black market and renders our prison system ineffective. The legalization of cannabis would bring undeniable medical and economic benefits to society and the government. Varying degrees of marijuana legalization have

In conclusion, Pallasmaa discusses the importance of these senses in the design process. He talks of the distance created

The most challenging times for me were those when we would be losing and all the players would get angry with one another. This was especially apparent when one of the defenders on our team would make a mistake and allow the other team to score. Many players would then yell at him creating a negative attitude both toward themselves and the player. At that time, even though I was actually angry myself, I would both stop the other players from yelling and offer encouragement to the one who had made the mistake. For the most part, I would simply offer some advice by pointing out what he had done wrong and told him how to do it right the next time. Thereby, I would always keep a very positive attitude and told the players that they were doing well, but they just had to do it better next time. I know that the way I approached the problem helped maintain a positive attitude among all the players. This approach led to the team playing better and winning more.