Revising Practice #1 Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. Then fill in the answer on your answer document. In the following paper Ben writes about how an act of kindness changed his outlook toward others. Read Ben’s paper and think about how he should revise it. Then answer the questions that follow. The Spark (1) They say just one spark can start a fire. (2) That may be true of a forest fire, but I had no idea that it could also be true for people until a spark touched my life. (3) With my dad out of work and three kids at home, times were tough. (4) They tried to hide how bad things were, but I was too old to be fooled. (5) I knew there were days when they didn’t know how they were going to buy groceries. (6) Then one afternoon I opened the mailbox and saw a stack of green bills sitting …show more content…
(7) Attached was a note that simply read “Pay it forward.” (8) When I brought the money inside, my whole family just sat in shock for a few minutes. (9) Then we gave thanks for the generosity of a stranger. (10) Next we talked. (11) Before long, we were thinking of all sorts of things we could do to help others. (12) Each family member decided to pay it forward in a different way. (13) My younger sister gathered books to donate to an afterschool program, and my brother mowed an elderly neighbor’s lawn. (14) Dad and I fixed another neighbor’s fence, and Mom offered to babysit for a single mother who had gone back to school to get a degree. (15) With each act of kindness, we told the story of how we had been helped, and we challenged the recipients to help someone else. (16) Within a matter of days, we started to hear stories of others who had benefited from a spark of kindness. (17) The man whose fence we fixed told us how he helped another friend clean out her garage. (18) The kids in the
Kindness can alter everything. Kindness can change everything. In the article “The Science of Good Deeds” one of the quotes says “Two large studies found that older adults who volunteered reaped benefits in their health and well-being.” This influences people that are aged. It can help older people with their health. It also can help the people getting helped. Additionally in the article “Doing good Does You Good” one of the quotes states. “When you help others, it promotes positive physiological changes in the brain associated with happiness.” Helping other people out can benefit you for the reason that it can help you become more happy. It also can make you feel better. It can benefit other people for the reason that they get helped. It
2: During the summer, I got a working opportunity at the local government of my hometown. My job was to
However, one surprising pleasant morning we were set up at an elementary school when we noticed a potential family festival nearby. The volunteers began buzzing with excitement as we realized the nice weather and festival were the perfect combination to draw a sizeable crowd. As expected we were hit with an unceasing stream of people from noon to take down. The entire day I bustled from one job to the next rummaging through an endless pile of clothing, restocking tables that emptied as soon as filled and counting heads all while conversing with the shoppers. The lull that came at the end of the day filled the air and we began packing up. As I jumped down from loading the last container I watched the counters face transform from a look of concentration to that of exuberance. “We were able to help seventy families today!” she cheered. We all crowded around in disbelief and shared triumphant shouts. Delight fills my heart when I think of all the lives that we impacted that day but for a long time after woe clouded the memory. We could give a million outfits to a million families and there would still be someone who went
Benjamin was compassion. He thought about other people before him one example that Benjamin stated was “I gave the other two rolls to a woman and her child that came down the river in the boat.” While he could've ate all of the rolls he had he was kind to give his rolls away to a family,because he knew that the mom couldn’t afford to buy any food so he was nice to help them out.
Ben’s Autobiography begins in humility and ends in humility. He is born into a modest family being the youngest son of the youngest son for five generations back. He finishes part two with the modesty of an accomplished elder. However, in between it is full of arrogance and pride. During his early years (part 1 of The Autobiography), Ben’s diligence and thirst for knowledge continuously put him in comforting situations. Unfortunately he
This small act of kindness has made a big impact on me and was very important for me. Without their help, I couldn't have saved my image among all the national competitors I had to present to. When I look back this, I'm glad to have experienced this obstacle. Though it was stressful, I learned the importance of the act of kindness. Perhaps for them, them it made no difference, but for me, it made a big impact on my day and
see what it was and found a little puppy curled up, all alone. I grabbed it and took it home with me.
4. It must be hard for you to be away from home! (turns head toward me and pauses)
Ben struggled with place attachment; cultivating back into his social group with peers after his accident. He experienced grief and comments on finding out who his real friends were during the process. Going from a healthy young man to person dependent on others for personal care was an extreme shift.
In the text, "Random Acts Of Kindness Defines Who We Really Are," the author is writing to not only inform the reader about what the around a person who might judge you or say something about you that you don't like. The author makes many diverse quotes that has the same effect as the one above throughout the entire text, these types of quotes gives examples for the quote that was stated early. One example from the text states, "Small acts of kindness like leaving a meal for a homeless person or paying off a stranger's layaway balance at Kmart, start trends with more people getting in on the act because they are such feel-good stories." The author uses this effects of being kind are, but also to persuade the reader to be kind and do good deeds
If I were to be selected to this group, my contribution would be to spread that happy, warm, saved feeling people get when others do nice things for them. Something as simple as volunteering in a soup kitchen, helping the adults at the kids’ museum, walking a dog, or tutoring a fellow classmate can benefit them
“A random act of kindness, no matter how small, can make a tremendous impact on someone else’s life.” - Roy Bennett
Revising is ensuring your essay is organized and reflects your thesis, while editing is done to ensure your words and message are clear. To revise an essay, the writer should make sure each paragraph relates to the thesis, that the essay is structured well with complete sentences and paragraphs, and that the essay includes an introduction and conclusion. One way to help revise your essay is to, “…consider putting yourself in the shoes of your readers when you revise and trying to determine whether what you have written will be clear and understandable to your audience” (Connell, 2013, p. 9.2). This helps ensure your thoughts are well organized and flow well. Revising checks the writer’s accuracy for focus, structure, organization, completion,
A gentle breeze touched the warmth of my cheeks, sparks were flying, as the fire fanned by the breeze, and was rapidly spreading. A temporary sensation entered my mind, as if a breeze ruffled through my thoughts. I remember visiting my grandparents over the summer, strolling along the majestically beautiful golden wheat field of the twelve-mile old dirt road leading to my grandparents’ house. My grandparent’s property was quite interesting. The house was a limestone structure with a front yard. The grape tree grew around the foundation, anchoring itself onto the pergola, it sort of wild on the top of the
In June of 2014, a family of eight spent their summer traveling around the country to help families in need. Instead of them spending their summer going to the beach, they are volunteering their time to help other families in need. They helped about 25 families around