I conducted the review of the sample essay, A Scarcity of Charity, using the requirements in the official peer review rubric. This rubric takes focus, organization, development, language, syntax, and general grammar/mechanics into consideration. As a whole, the sample essay does an adequate job in fulfilling the requirements outlined in the rubric. But a few key errors take what would have been an excellent paper and turn it into an average one. The author of the sample essay does well in regards to focus and organization. She has a main thesis that is a debatable opinion rather than an indisputable fact. The rest of the paper, as guided by the subtopic thesis statements, is geared toward proving the author’s opinion. The subtopic …show more content…
Her strong suit is seamlessly blending evidence from the text into the content of the essay. She provides interpretation of the evidence when it is necessary so her readers can see how the evidence applies. Her in text documentation of the evidence is flawless and follows the MLA formatting. She made a slight error on the “Works Cited” page when she did not indent the second line of the source. Unfortunately, the evidence that is documented does not always support her thesis and subtopic thesis statements. The women’s argument does not show how Marian was unprepared for her “charity” visit, yet the author used it anyway. Another error in development comes when she uses the phrase “untouched by an emotional vacuum” to describe Marian after she gets on the bus. According to the sample essay, eating an apple after refusing to give the old woman a nickel is proof that the girl feels nothing for the women. While this does seem to be the case, the phrase itself is confusing and causes readers to stop. The author offers little interpretation in this area of the paper, which forces her readers to sort out for themselves what the author …show more content…
The author does very well in this section. The language of the paper is formal and is third person. She uses vocabulary that is appropriate for the audience. There are a few punctuation errors, but they do not detract from the paper or lead to run-on/fragmented sentences. The sentences are varied and well written. Also, the author did a decent job in proofreading her paper. There is only one exception to this. The author wrote “things” when she meant “thinks” in the sentence:
“During her brief stay at the Home, Marian things of the first old woman as a bird and the second as a sheep.”
This is one instance where the author failed to detect a grammatical
In this essay, I will review Ursula Bradford’s week five assignment, and give feedback based on the Capella Comprehensive Exam Rubric (Capella, 2016) grading standards. The areas that I will review are content and focus, analysis and critical thinking, logic and flow, structure and organization, writing style, APA format grammar, usage and mechanics.
Emily Andrews argues in her essay “Why I Don’t Spare “Spare Change”” that it does more harm than good to give money to beggars on the street rather than giving to an organization such as United Way to help the needy, pointing out that “one cannot be certain that one is giving to a needy individual” and that by giving to a charitable organization “ones money is likely to be used wisely.”
The next big thing, A Break With Charity, a book about the Salem witch trials is grabbing the attention of many young minds in search of a good book.The fascinating book starts off with 16 year old Susannah English who longs to receive the answer to when her brother will return to Salem Massachusetts from a supposed fortune teller Tituba. Tituba is a slave who works for Reverend Parris. A circle of girls has already been seeing her and Susanna wants to join in. The leader of the circle Ann Putnam has started a flood of accusations about being witches towards innocent people when Susanna English really knows the truth. In order to keep Susanna “in line” and to not rat out Ann Putnam, Ann threatens to accuse Susanna’s mom of witchcraft. This
Zaske approaches her introduction in a different manner than the previous writers. She provides several questions that will be answered in the essay and briefly describes some of the topics to be addressed
The main thing that I notice was the very free and flowing prose that was, at time, almost poetic. I am unsure if it was the intention of the writer to create something that sounds very smooth to the reader, or is this was just the result of the author writing something that translates over from creating writing that is so stream of consciousness. Due to the short nature of this article, the author has less space to make is clear to the reader what her writing style
Well written section. The article is well written overall with the use of transitions to move between
The writer made sure to answer all of the questions. I love how you included her opinion. It helped me to connect better to your response. One of the weaknesses I found was not including enough information. For example, when answering the three points question. I think you should further explain your point. Overall, I think you did a really good
Yes, Bob is morally responsible for his failure to act. He may not have physically killed the child, but he had the ability to stop the child’s death from occurring. At the realization of what was about to occur and knowing he could pull the switch, the child’s life was in Bob’s hands. The moral dilemma is in Bob placing more value in his car then a human life. Singer writes, “Thinking of his joy in owning the car and the financial security it represents, Bob decides not to throw the switch. The child is killed.”
In this paper I shall first raise some objections to the argument and then try to show how it might be improved.
The essential topic of the story is recommended by the undeniable incongruity of the title, for Marian's visit isn't one of genuine philanthropy, but instead a formal, regulated signal. It absolutely does not speak to the scriptural thought of philanthropy in 1 Corinthians, which is translated in the Revised Standard Version of the Bible as "adoration," or thoughtful distinguishing proof of one individual with another. From the earliest starting point of the story, Marian does not think about the two old ladies as individuals like herself. She not exclusively knows about the weirdness of the old women, yet she likewise has turned into an outsider to herself. Tossed out of her natural world, where she has a place, she is in a bizarre dreamworld, where she seriously feels her distinction from the old women and along these lines her own particular partition and segregation. This emblematic feeling of distance clarifies the odd, illusory impact of the nursing home on Marian.
The World is divided by the northern and Western Hemispheres. The North embraces all the developed and industrialized countries, while the South is comprised of the underdeveloped and unindustrialised countries. In a report published by the Royal Geographic Society (2013), it was found that the 13 richest people in the world were richer than all the countries in the Southern Hemisphere put together. In a report commissioned by the United Nations, Hellier found that 25% of the global population resided in the north but held 80% of the global wealth (2012). Philanthropic efforts have done much to save Africans and Asian populations from famine but this is not enough. Philanthropy should not focus on famine but on the reasons for famine.
If you read this exact same essay for the first time with the impression that it has been written by someone prestigious, you may view it as something amazing and brilliant.
Three areas that the author could improve on are: thesis, format of the body, and format of the conclusion.
In order to do so, this essay will review the literature on this problematic by drawing on a selection of available documents. We shall first concentrate on the different errors and
This thesis is separated into two main sections, namely a theoretical part and a practical part.