Personal Narrative: Still Have Improvements

When reading my outline of corrections, I realized a lot of minor imperfections. When writing my essay, I just assumed I was writing everything correctly. I made tons of minor grammar mistakes, that could have been avoided by proof reading. My major mistakes came from comma placement. When trying to find ways to improve the placement of my commas, I came across this website https://owl.english.purdue.edu/exercises/3/5/15/answer. It’s a site that helps you to improve your punctuation placement. It gives you sentences and ask you how many commas does this sentences need, or is it correct? I went through this 7 times till I got them all correct. I still have work I need to do,

Growing up with a father in the military, you move around a lot more than you would like to. I was born just east of St. Louis in a city called Shiloh in Illinois. When I was two years old my dad got the assignment to move to Hawaii. We spent seven great years in Hawaii, we had one of the greatest churches I have ever been to name New Hope. New Hope was a lot like Olivet's atmosphere, the people were always friendly and there always something to keep someone busy. I used to dance at church, I did hip-hop and interpretive dance, but you could never tell that from the way I look now.

So, you’ve got Bywater’s English 1010 class and you don’t know what to write about? Don’t worry, you are not alone. Although Professor Bywater’s class may seem intimidating, it truly is one of the most rewarding classes you will take at DSU, and it will help you throughout your college career when it comes to writing papers. Professor Bywater’s class comes with an amazing textbook titled Rules of Thumb and a checklist, or Writing Guide 101, and this checklist will save your life and your paper. Using transition sentences between paragraphs, understanding pronouns, and using the correct point of view are the most important points in Professor Bywater’s checklist, and I will show you the correct usage and implementation of all three. Read and retain the following information and you will succeed in English 1010 and gain the skills you need to succeed in college making your life, and your papers, easier.

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This semester of writing has been truly interesting for me. Being able to write within a topic that interests me has made the process more exciting and engaging. I can see this growth in my papers this semester, but I feel that other, perhaps, cannot. It is true that the mechanics of my writing have improved and I am more able to articulate my thoughts and position. However, the real improvement, that other may not see, has been in my self-esteem and confidence in my own writing skills. I chose my sixth writing assignment as my example of progress for a variety of reasons. The two most prominent reasons are that it is one of my later assignments, and, therefore, will represent the most recent evidence of my progress and that it received my highest grade of all of my assignments.

Starting over. Those two simple words pretty much sum up where I am at in my life at the moment. I am a 34 year old mother of three. I have never been to college. My husband just recently left me. It has been a whirlwind summer to say the least, but before I get into what brought me back to school, I'll start at the beginning. I was born in FL., and quite literally spent all my time either at the beach or running bare foot on my grandparents farm. I loved every second. Shortly after I turned 8 my mom met my step-dad, and we were quickly headed on our first big adventure, moving to Texas! While I missed my family in FL., I can not tell you enough how happy I was that my mom married my dad. He has been a rock and solid foundation for me my whole

Writing is such an important tool. It has the capacity to empower both the reader and writer. There is even a famous proverb that says, “The pen is mightier than the sword.” That’s why it makes sense for the majority of my academic career to be geared towards the improvement of my writing. There is no denying that there is an infinite number of ways that I can improve my writing. After writing multiple essays for this English 100 Y class, my professor pointed out certain aspects of my writing that I could work on. Two of those suggestions stuck out to me because it seemed as though I was making these mistakes multiple times throughout various forms of writing. One of the mistakes I make is the use of ‘favorite’ words, or words that I use too many times in the same paper; another is that I use choppy sentences while writing my essays.

My earliest memories of reading was when my mom sent me to bible school and the teacher would read out a hand book

Overall, to improve my current strengths is to continue to write my paper down before typing it

For the next paper I feel as if I should do some research on how to fix those errors on my own, rather than relying on the person who edits my paper. I feel as if it would be in my best interest to find a website that explains the things I really struggle

One skill I greatly improved upon was my ability to gather and organize information. On my first paper, Arguing a Position (AaP), I did very poorly on this. The paper was arguing that the mass surveillance by the United States government had gone too far and was suppressing individuals’ freedoms. I spent a long time researching for this essay. When I went to sort through it all I had found that I had gathered way too much information and I had not organized it in any useful way. This put me behind the rest of the class in the writing process. I was still typing down to the very last day, while everyone else was editing, which hurt the quality of my essay. I did, however, learn from these mistakes. In my second essay, Proposing a Solution (PaS), I proposed a solution to the algae problem in Western Lake Erie. I feel I did much better at researching for this paper. I collected less information and only kept the information that I knew would be useful in writing the essay. This saved time which allowed me to put more effort into the quality of the writing. For this reason my PaS essay was much better than my AaP. This improvement shows that I have improved enough to earn credit for this course.

First, after my first three drafts of my Concept essay, I realized I was stubbornly attempting to preserve awkward phrases and wording, despite the fact that others had warned me that they lacked clarity. Specifically, two of my peers that I had asked to revise my paper had advised me that one of my sentences, while it contained essential information, was constructed in an awkward manner. Notably, the sentence to which they had been referring had been the very first sentence of the paper, which meant that is was extremely important that I made it clear and interesting. If my opening words were not strong, memorable, and clear, any potential readers would not be interested in the rest of my essay. My peers had told me that the opening sentence had not made sense to them, yet because it made sense to me I was hesitant to revise it. Fortunately, I eventually changed

Anyone could have heard me; anyone could have saved me. But, no one bothered to really stop and listen for me. Could I have been louder? Do you think if I had raised a ruckus, anyone would have helped me? Everyone has their own opinions on what I should have done differently. Frightened and alone, I had no way of making myself known. Giving the exception of my discovery, of course. “Help” had finally saved me from the sewer. I had been trapped there for so long and had become so sick and weak. Just before I came down here, I was loving. Kindhearted, caring, and ever so cute. Love was something I was never short of. Most people would have appreciated that. Not everyone though. Of everyone who could have taken the utmost care of me, I ended up

I was brought up into a family who believed in working hard to get what you want, and I too, have taken in this belief. I started taking a part in our family farm at a very young age, and have stayed involved each year. It’s not always enjoyable, but having my easy-going dad around, to keep the frustrating moments calm, sure can make it enjoyable for me. My grandpa and great uncle also helped me have a strong connection to the farm, and always helping out when help was needed. I was never believed by many when I told stories of driving the combine at a young age in school. My peers and teachers all thought it was near impossible, for a kid my size to operate such large equipment, but believe me or not, there isn’t much to it. It may look big and scary, but it happens to be my favorite part of farming.

As I approach graduation I have been able to reflect upon the people in my life that have supported and influenced me over the past four years. The people who have been most influential in these past four years are my dad, my boss, and my eighth grade math teacher. My dad taught me to be hard working, my boss taught me to be adaptable, and my eighth grade math teacher taught me how to be organized. Although my dad has taught me to be hardworking these past four years I have learned a lot for myself.