Writing is always a challenge to me. Before I entered English Composition 2I class, my writing skill is not strong. Grammar, especially, is my weakest point. Although for now, I may not come up with an essay with zero grammar mistakes, I indeed believe that my grammar improves a lot. I also learned how to better structure my paper by logically orientating my paragraphs. I learned that I need bridging sentences and transitional phrases to make my paper flow better. I learned several strategies about writing introduction and conclusion paragraph as well. All the improvements are showed in my final portfolio. In the portfolio, I put in my writing project #2, which is about stereotypes of North Eastern Chinese people, and writing project #3, …show more content…
However, the thesis statement does not indicate the three points that I am going to discuss in the following essay clearly. Some word choices, like overlook, and appearances are wrong. The sentence is very confusing. Thus, I revised the first sentence and made it more like parallel structure in order to deliver the main focus of my paper clearer. I also changed the word overlook to suggest to make the tone not too strong. Here is my thesis for second draft:
The examination of this example supports the experts' idea that people unconsciously carry stereotypes, categorize others into groups and evaluate them with in-group/out-group dynamics, and use facial appearances to formulate stereotypes. Moreover, my example suggests that regional differences may also cause the stereotypes to emerge, and the physical appearances influence stereotypes as well.
I could tell that the thesis is clearer but there were still some small problems. The in-group/out-group dynamic is a bit repetitive because I have mentioned it before so I deleted it. The word physical appearance is not very precise so I change to physiques. Here is my final thesis:
The example supports the experts' ideas that people unconsciously carry stereotypes, categorize and evaluate others in terms of groups, and judge peoples based on their facial appearance. Moreover, the example suggests that people also categorize
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To begin with, after reading the comments given to me by my fellow classmates; I noticed that some of my classmates didn’t like the idea of jumping straight into book without a brief description. In other words, they felt that I needed to provide an introduction to my paper and make my thesis clear in the beginning, rather than stating it on the second page. With that in mind, and since the readers pretended like they never read the books before, I decided to take some sentences out and rearrange the order of the first two pages. In addition to this, it bothered me that all the response forms interpreted my thesis statement differently, which meant my thesis wasn’t clear to the readers. Granted that some of the readers understood what I was trying to do, I decided to rephrase my thesis and try to make it as clear as possible that way they know early on what this paper incorporates.
There are three major perspectives on stereotypes: Psychodynamic perspective, sociocultural perspectives and Cognitive perspectives. Psychodynamic perspective argues that stereotypes serve intra-psychic needs - protect self against anxiety (ego defense mechanisms); self-esteem benefits to viewing outgroup negatively. If stereotypes are to change, alternatives must be supplied for protecting against anxiety. Sociocultural argues that stereotypes are made by society and that for stereotypes to change new stereotypes need to be made. Cognitive Perspectives suggest that categorization is fundamental - simplifies, organizes, allows predictability. Stereotypes guide information processing to produce a bias that maintains the status quo. Attend to, notice stereotype-consistent information, make stereotype-consistent inferences, and recall stereotype-consistent information better, and so on.
It is common for people in society to assume certain characteristics about a person based solely on their visual appearance. Though it is extremely easy to confuse ethnicities when judging by appearance, it is common for people to make assumptions about people’s culture, habits, and overall livelihood when they assign people to an ethnic category based on their looks without knowing the truth. A major issue with ethnic stereotyping is its ability to influence people to conform to ethnic stigmas. Many people subconsciously adapt to socially-constructed expectations related to ethnicity. This is often caused merely by human nature, in which people usually seek affiliation among their peers and fail to explore alternative ways of
Devine (1989) argues that stereotypes are inevitable on the basis that stereotypes and prejudice coexist and that stereotyping occurs automatically. Devine attempts to prove this hypothesis in three experiments. Devine reasons that “as long as stereotypes exist, prejudice will follow.” This hypothesis is rooted in a correlation. Prejudice and stereotypes are related, however there is no clear evidence of causality; Knowledge of a stereotype does not mean an individual agrees with it.
In our society, when people encounter someone, the first concern appearing in their minds about that person are race, gender, and appearance that are crucial since it can determine how they relate to the person. That consumption mostly comes from stereotype, the firm thoughts that people make about a particular group of people based on observation of several members of the group. The advantage of stereotype is helping people respond rapidly to their situations by applying the same thoughts to the similar experience, but that applying may be incorrect because individuals are different. That black people are good at athletics, or Asians are wealthy are positive stereotypes. Conversely, that Latinos commit illegal immigration, black people are associated with urban crime, or young Asians are gangs are negative stereotypes. That indicates the existence of both positive and negative stereotypes in the society; however, the negative stereotypes are likely
There is no significant deviation from the main topic of the paper in the body paragraphs, yet they do not directly correspond the supporting details of the thesis statement nor are clear references to the thesis included in the body of the paper. At times, certain details appear to be disconnected form the main topic, at least initially; making sure that every piece of information clearly and directly supports the argument of the thesis would make the body somewhat more cohesive and on-point.
Thank you for your help on my discussion. When I read your thesis statement it sounds like your goal is to complete your degree. I also sense that learning the material in this class seems to be a vital piece to completing the entire degree. Is that where you are going with this paper?
I would like to address the use of English in your essay, particularly for several incorrect spelling and grammar, which I already marked and inserted comments on your paper.
It has been demonstrated by previous research that the illusory correlation in stereotype formation is to separate groups in a meaningful way (Ford & Tonander, 1998). Attributes can become strongly associated in memory when the difference of groups is high. Stereotypes are used to maximize self-esteem by differentiating into an in-group and an out-group as
There are many cons about being stereotypical to someone. Some of the cons are, it might hurt someone’s feelings, have a lasting impact on someone’s life, and could cause problems at workplaces, schools etc. It can hurt someone’s feelings because it causes a terrible understanding of a person. If people say that all Asians are terrible drivers, which might give other people an idea that all Asians are bad drivers which is not true. That will also give Asians a bad reputation because just a handful of Asians are terrible drivers. Sometimes, being stereotypical could cause people to take it to heart and stays with them for a long time. Especially when something tragic happened to someone which is similar to the stereotype. A family of the victim could have died because of an Asian driver who was driving recklessly. That could remind them about that situation and could really impact them. Sometimes, being stereotypical could lead to conflicts at work or school or any other place. There are many people who take stereotypes too far and some who take it too seriously. With only 1 of them, that could lead to a
Although our personal stereotypes and biases greatly impact our view of others and the world around us, is it reasonable to believe that our mental inclinations can also render substantial influence in the lives of the people we judge? Today when we hear and use the word "stereotype", it is usually within a negative context; it carries a negative charge. However, there are those who persist in asserting the positive effects of stereotypes. As was discussed earlier, stereotypes are convenient for situations where we need to execute swift judgments and lack the time to properly assimilate and process thoroughly; they are helpful in regards to self-preservation and efficient functioning. Stereotypes also allow us to fit in with the select group
Stereotyping is the “selective attribution of specific trait of characteristic to particular social groups and their members” (Wyer 1). As human beings, our brains have developed a way to store information about other people’s behavior, through similarities. This
Stereotyping is a process that every person will experience in their lives. It is part of being of a group to be associated with others of the same group. Stereotyping can come in many forms either by judging the whole group by the action of a few, or by judging a single individual by the action of someone else in the same group.”Stereotyping means classifying a person as part of a group, making a generalization to that person”(Floyd, 2012, p. 116). Stereotyping is disliked by so many people because they do not wish to be judged by the actions of others. When you meet new people you often want to make a good impression and show
1. I had a confusing time summing up the main ideas which translates to people reading my summary and understanding what the article was about. I did a good job concluding the solution of what Mrs.Coontz was saying. Yes, I understand that some of the things I was talking about were confusing due that I was assuming to much. I should not assume the reader knows what the article was about.
When Black and White faces were categorised seperately, priming of stereotypes occurred and the reaction time to associate Black faces with stereotypes increased. Conclusions were drawn that grouping of Black and White will increase and strengthen social stereotypes. This result would not have been obtained from a cross-categorisation study and thereby may be a useful tool in further exploration.