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Analysis Of The Book ' Hello Latasha '

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Hello Latasha, I hope everything is well with your son and I understand your lack of posting because I believe family comes first no matter what. I am happy to see that the brownie is back in the story and you have done a great job switching between first and third person. I am still in love with the first sentence because it really draws you into the story and makes the reader understand exactly how the mood is feeling. It also shows the reader a glimpse into the setting and what kind of conditions this place had. There were a couple of mechanical things I would like to point out to you that I feel can be fixed easily with a good reread. The first thing I noticed was the story switches between past and present tense; something I tend to do all the time and can easily be read over, but can be confusing for some readers. The second thing I noticed was a bunch of run on sentences that created paragraphs; what I mean is that it may look like a paragraph, but it 's actually two very long sentences that can be cut down into shorter sentences. The last mechanical thing I noticed was some punctuation and grammar errors that can be spotted with a grammar website like Paperrater or Grammerly. I am #1 when it comes to screwing up grammar and punctuation so I use both of them to check my piece and even then I still miss stuff. Usually at that point I hand it off to my sister. Have a family member, friend, coworker or even stranger read your piece you will get and idea of where

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