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"One solution to decline in moral values in today’s world would be for men and women to return to their traditional roles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" Roles of men and women are an important part contributing to moral values in the society. Many people claim that women’s participation in the workforce leads to moral decline in the community. However, I believe women going to work will have more more knowledge and
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for example, effects of the internet or unfair competition in business should be taken into account
In conclusion, I belive the main reason for decreasing in moral values doesn’t lie in whether women works or not. People should think about tendencies such as abusing internet or competing unfairly in business for the sake of profit.
hanks to this essay. One thing that Id like to make is that " words count is high : 336 words. Indeed, the more we write in the exam, the more likely we make mistakes.
The second thing is that the question asks about traditional roles of BOTH men and women. But you just wrote about women working. I think you could lose points in terms of TASK RESPONSE. Then I suppose that the question just asks about WOMEN working then write my essay. I think your introduction and first paragraph is good , just some errors like wrote two more consequently. But at the second paragraph I found less relative sentences to the main topic.
I tried to make your essay short, although I think still has some problem. I hope Mr. ENda helps both us.
Women play a key role in the moral values of a society. Some people claim that today women’s participation in the workforce is responsible for declining morality in the community. However, I believe that participating in society could be of great benefit to both women and communities.
The major reason that why some people disagree with women’ activity is
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In regards to employment, women today can do paid work, but their work is usually menial, badly paid and lacking in status (Krieken et al, 2000). Kate Millet (1970) saw women as a reserve labour force who are made use of when they are needed (for example in war time) but are discarded when not required (Krieken et al,
While social change has brought on more changes than what women are a custom too, at one point in history women actually felt a form of importance in fulfilling their roles not only in the home; but outside as well. “These demographic shifts account for many new or altered roles, such as increased number of duel-earner families, later and fewer marriages, fewer children, increased life expectancy, and the massive migration shifting employees across a nation and across the globe” (Lindsey, 2011, pg. 275).
Women have been a vital key to the shaping and progression of our society. Throughout time, women’s roles and opportunities in the family, workplace, and society have greatly evolved. They started from being housewives that don’t have many rights, even in the household, to being valued citizens in our
Hello Rozhnaz! This writing looks better than the previous one that I revised; congrats! You also gain improvement in terms of the use of academic vocabularies in this essay. Some notes to be considered here are the minor things such as punctuation, redundant expression, and capitalization. Here are several takes on your writing:
“The Importance of Work” is an essay from The Feminine Mystique, by Betty Friedan. The whole essay talks about how humans can contribute to the society with their full capacities through work and that women should hold jobs equivalent to men. Friedan insists that men and women need work that satisfies their creativity and contributes to human society. Today, doing paid work is a necessity because it helps us get through the day wether for our needs or our pleasures. The money earned from work supports the whole family. According to Mrs. Olive Schreiner, “if women did not win back their right to a full share of honored and useful work, women’s mind and muscle would weaken in a parasitic state; her offspring, male and female would weaken progressively, and civilization itself would deteriorate.” (Friedan 8) I strongly agree with this statement. I believe that the work ethic of most generations are influenced by parents. It is obvious that we look up to our parents. If the parents do not show any desire to work, their children will copy them and will not contribute to society. If a mother who is a stay-at-home mother or has a different job does not work hard or does not show any work ethic, her children will look up to her and follow her footsteps and eventually “civilization would deteriorate.” (Friedan 8)
1. The writer defines the role of women in the society. She points out the extent women take to raise a family despite unemployment. She highlights that women do not need the dependency on men to fulfill their goals.
This is Jarmain Harrell from your English 1023 class at the North Acadian BRCC College on Tuesdays and Thursdays from 10: 30 am - 11:45 pm. I know our essay rough drafts aren’t due until Thursday but I hoped you could take a look at mine to see if I did everything correctly. I added a few things such as quotes and a couple of sentences but the majority came from the six summaries I did. Was it okay that I used a quote twice in the essay? I used it in the Introduction and reword it in the conclusion. Is are the quotes in the correct place?
7) Did you notice anything about the way in which this essay was written that seems to contradict essay “rules” you have been taught in the past? If so, explain
organize your thoughts. Then you may begin writing your essay. You may feel free to add additional
Women and men have had certain roles in society that were understood amongst them to be specified for their particular gender. Males were known to have the leading role as head of the house hold and the bread winner while the woman’s duty was to stay at home and take care of the house and children. While many people years ago deemed this way of life and practice to be the right and ethical thing to do, times have changed and so this kind of treatment towards a woman’s equality must be questioned. Even though times have changed, this mindset of a woman’s ability to be as good as a man has not completely gone away. In today’s society a woman contributes to the economy and her family as equally as that of a man. Therefore, women should share equal rights and opportunities as their gender counterparts.
Gender roles is a very controversial topic in today’s society, especially when it comes to working. 100 years ago, in Europe, women were working long hours in factories. Women also worked as nurses, cleaned wealthy people 's homes, and were craftswomen. Meanwhile, 100 years ago in the United States women were expected to stay home and take care of the family/home, while the men went out and worked an average of ten hours a day for six days a week, compared to the traditional five day weeks and 8 hour days.
Women fought very hard for their rights in the workplace. Some of them, including Susan B Anthony, went above and beyond the norm. Yet, today our rights are still not the same as a man’s. At one point women weren’t allowed to work at all, and today they are allowed to have jobs while still being home makers. Although improvements have been made, there are still several dilemmas that need to be addressed. A women earns less than a man when doing the same work, and that is extremely unfair. Another issue in the workplace is that men underestimate women due to lack of strength and discrimination. There are also the issues of pregnancy and sexual
The generation now has made it easier to equalize men and women but there is still a substantial amount of places where gender inequality is still happening in the workplace and where females still face discrimination. Women are often discriminated in the workplace and are usually not promoted as quickly as men are and they also receive less pay. History shows that women have not always been defined as property and thought of as second class citizens. But in the 21st century many have seen a drastic change in the so called “traditional” family ways where women are suppose to stay home and take care of the household chores, food, and children and men are suppose to work to support their family and provide financial stability. Many assume that in the workplace women are more vulnerable and less competent than men because women 's instincts are to put their family before work or anything else. Whereas men are the ones who will usually stay the late hours to work. People on both sides of the political spectrum and everywhere in between seem to be fearful of what is to come and more fearful of others than they are often willing to admit.
Women have experienced a historic situation of inequality in the social as well as professional aspects. Women were normally the ones that would take care of children, do the chores in the house, and in rural areas; they would work in the field with the rest of the family. However, today’s women have become more self-sufficient and independent from the predominant male figure within every historical family. Gender inequality in the workplace is becoming less common; yet, gender is a factor that affects men and women. Especially women have been subjected to a historical discrimination that has influenced society to decide which job is more suitable for women than men. However women have confronted and tried to break down the barriers that