In general speaking, all of the comments is helpful for our writing. As we are the writer of the essay, we know that we are handing out our " shitty first draft". We desire to polish and present the work of perfection, however, we fail to determine where to start. The confusion of whether our judgments is right or wrong is one of the vital obstacle in writing. That is when we need the assistance of other people. No matter how good or bad is the comments, and no matter agree or disagree with the comments, it is still a valuable reaction of readers in reading our essay. As a writer who want the meaning of the essay to be understandable, I would certainly tried to revise it whenever the comments show the needs. The most important part of the …show more content…
Searching for the stories that can be added into the essay as the evidences or examples of my thesis. As far as I am concern, the explanations in my essay are pretty hollow. And my personal knowledge right now cannot help me with that. Even though all comments are helpful to me, there is one comment that I can determine as the least useful one. It is a praise of a good transition, of which I think is not a good one but a mere effort. I was just trying to put a transition at the end of the paragraph . And I think I have done it awfully for ending all my thesis explanation paragraph with just one sentence of transition pop out of nowhere. The praise actually made me feel guilty about it. In the workshop, I surely need much more time to analyze the others essay more carefully. However, I suppose a limit amount of time is a part of our training. I find it useful to separate the workshop into two sections. First, we comment the essays individually. Secondly, we explain the problem of the essays, and we discuss the matters with the writer about their issue. Another essential part of the workshop is that no matter how bad or deconstructed our article are, write more in order to help the readers understand the main point of the article so we could form our assumption and point out where the weaknesses of our works
Writing is a powerful tool for communication and connection. As an extension and expression of the mind, writing is as much about the mental processes of the author as it is about the final marks laid to paper. As we write, we hold in mind our own thoughts on the work, anticipate the reader’s thoughts, and think both in concrete and abstract ways in order to accomplish the task at hand. Whether an academic research paper, a novel, or text message to friends, writing seeks to engage, persuade, or impress concepts upon an audience. Like language and other art forms in general, the practice of writing is ever-evolving and is subject to cultural and contextual influence, expectations, and conventions. Each writer holds a theory
So you 're a competent writer. You have written plenty of essays in high school. Yet, for some reason, you still can 't see to get an A on an essay. You have the basics of writing down, so what more can you do? Here are some more advanced advice to spice up your essays, and earn you that A! How to Write a College Essay: Address the Opposition Read any book about writing an essay, and you will be told to address the opposition. Acknowledging that your thesis can be argued may seem like it would hinder your essay, but it actually makes it stronger. When you leave the reader to come up with their own argument against your essay, they think that your ideas are then wrong. By saying that there is a counter argument, you are actually strengthening your essay. You are saying that your idea is in fact the better idea compared to the opposition. You can address the counter argument in a couple of different ways. You can either write the counter arguments all in one paragraph, or weave them into your paper. The most important thing to remember is to address the opposition for every assertion you make. Being consistent in this makes you seem like you have a though out position, and will be taken more seriously by the reader. How to Write a College Essay: Define the Abstract Defining terms may seem like something high school told you never to do. And you should never start out an essay by saying: "The dictionary defines writing as…". But defining what you mean when you
However, though that may seem positive, I have understood that I have also had many flaws and weaknesses whilst writing my essay, which I had not kept in mind during its writing process. Firstly, I have a weakness in citing and using references to support the information I had implied within my work piece. Also, another weakness found is that whilst writing my essay, I tend to go for into my thinking stream and write up long sentences that in the finalized version of the essay need to be shortened. The biggest flaw however according to the lecturer is “that it had no supporting references on research to back up any of the arguments you were making – which made it less scientific and seemed more based on your intuition”. The comments received from the tutor where completely expected as I have had difficulties understanding the process of in-text citations and also due to forgetting to input a reference page towards the end of my essay. In total, my essay writing skills would be much better and a greater mark would have been awarded if these mistakes where avoided before the final submission of the essay; these flaws where all due to poor organization.
Writing a paper on the writing process is pretty hard. The writing process is different from one person to another. You come across questions like, 'What exactly is the writing process?'; and 'Must you follow one persons writing process if yours is different?'; This is where I came across the answer to my questions, write however you wish to write. If one person likes free write first and another person likes to write a draft first, let them do how they please.
After the first draft, one of the most important areas that I needed to improve was the analysis and finding better evidences for my point that I have made in my essay. The reason I had to go through struggle finding evidences in my first draft was because my thesis was not clear which made it hard to show my point in it. After the first draft, I was able to find some convenient sources that are related to my topic which helped me to support my point and made me have a better analysis on those points. However, I believe my analysis is somewhat effective as it should be according to the rubric after my final draft has been done, but there are still some places in the essay where I feel like it can still be improved. I tried my best to improve it as best as I can to make it clear to the audience by expanding more on it by giving more detailed about the points that I have made in the essay. However, I definitely learned how making my analysis more specific helped me a lot to make my essay clearer than being vague and general. After reviewing my Rhetorical Analysis, I definitely learned how doing a better research on my topic makes my argument
How do you typically go about preparing for a writing assignment? Describe the steps you take, including rereading the assignment, asking questions about it, talking to instructors or friends, jotting down ideas, gathering information, and so on. How far in advance of the due date do you usually begin working on the assignment?
Chapter 7 in Writing and Revising talks about strategies for developing. Developing an essay is a great way to back up the points you make in the essay with evidence that can pull the reader into what they are reading. One way is to give examples. When you give examples, you show the reader that your points make sense. You can start by giving examples of things that happen in your past, or you can use examples of things you get off of research. Providing details is another way to develop an essay. Giving details can make any image seem real for the reader. The details that you provide should be true to what the readers might see, hear, or experience in that situation. The details in the essay must also serve a purpose and they have to support the idea you are trying to get across to the reader.
The feedback which given was of great help, it provided direction for the paper. The feedback such as how to use and be critical about the articles used during research, to use them as a means to strengthen points made. This has as allowed for closer reading and engaging in during readings, all the while looking for the information need for the essay. Also feedback about connecting points to allow follow of the essay, this was really taken into consideration in the planning of the essay this helped in making essay more concise.
However, I cannot perceive your negative and positive opinions for the original essay, I think you need to mention about that!
4. How do the intro and conclusion mirror or echo one another? How do they properly frame the essay as a whole? The intro gave me information about what is a “narcissist”, and the conclusion encourages the reader to keep looking for information.
Hello Han Low, I think your are off to a good start with what you want to revise in your essay. Transition sentences are very important in a paper, since they set-up what you will be discussing in the next paragraph. Therefore if you have a good transition then the reader will be able to follow your thought process better and in turn will be able to understand the paper better. However, you should also focus on the transitions and flow within your paragraphs as well because those are just as important as your transition sentences. Also your thought on strengthening your arguments is a very good idea because it shows that you are open to opposing ideas, rather than just saying one side or the argument. If you just showed one side the reader
Writing drafts is something I struggle with every time I have to do an essay. It takes me over two hours to finish an introduction. Once done with the introduction the body of the essay easy until I get to the conclusion, which is when my struggle to complete the draft returns. I believe the introduction of a draft is one of the most difficult parts for me of writing a draft because it is hard to come up with ideas for the introduction. Then the conclusion is hard because I have to find a way to restate what took me so long to come up with for the introduction. Ultimately, I will be able to complete a draft without difficulty for if I do them step by step and by write down my ideas and information before beginning anything and not to
I will provide as much feedback as I can on the essay. It will not only include grammar and punctuation corrections, but I will address relevant feedback that comments on their analysis. I will ask questions on the paper to guide inquiry, for when the student receives their paper back and reviews the comments. I will write a paragraph describing their strengths and weaknesses that were visible, and what they will need to work on in order to improve for the next time. I would definitely require students to revise their papers, and hand-in a rewrite. If I did not require them to rewrite their essay, I would require them to do peer edits using the read aloud protocol. After they have mastered the approach, I would provide them with a new prompt and excerpts. Using what they have learned by revising or editing their papers and their peer’s papers, I would ask them to rewrite their essays using the same prompt and excerpts they just wrote on. This will allow me to assess their improvement from what they knew, and what they know now to make a more effective analysis. ]
1. David’s primary purpose in sending a message is to inform the reader that the car company will not honour the customer’s claim. The writer’s priority is to inform the reader that the company would like to honour the claim, but point out that it could not happen because the warranty is expired.
You are driven to succeed. You are motivated to achieve your goals that you are prepared to overcome obstacles that would likely discourage and stop others. I believe this to be one the greatest characteristic that I can relate to. I am constantly setting short and long term goals. Goals are the milestones to living life. I am currently working on a project at work. There are about ten people assigned to this project. At this point of the project I am at 95% completion. The next person closet is sitting at 50% completed. I like to become organized at any task given, so that I can complete the task fast and have a high success rate.